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if really its me (Free verse) by Landon2
sometimes i feel ive lost my mind, the truth of my identity i just cant seem to find, buried deep in the sea lies my true self, but i bury it deeper trying to gain recgonition and wealth, ive put who i am on the very top shelf, and dusted off the identity of everyone else, ive shot a hole through my soul, im my charecter but play a someone elses role, in my eyes i cant just see, everyday i look in the mirror and wonder if its really me.

Up the ladder: My God
Down the ladder: Everyone Is

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.25
Weighted score: 4.910598
Overall Rank: 9621
Posted: September 20, 2006 9:11 PM PDT; Last modified: September 20, 2006 9:11 PM PDT
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[n/a] Ranger @ 86.137.108.154 | 21-Sep-06/2:35 AM | Reply
Could do with a run through the spellcheck.
[6] pete @ 195.92.168.168 | 21-Sep-06/5:30 PM | Reply
know the feeling :)! ... reads like it should be spoken over beats. If not, i'd introduce more rests and split some lines into 2 or 3 .....
[6] pete @ 195.92.168.168 > pete | 21-Sep-06/5:31 PM | Reply
sorry, that score should read a 6
[1] Edna Sweetlove @ 85.210.243.148 | 23-Sep-06/7:16 PM | Reply
Illiterate garbage.
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