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if really its me (Free verse) by Landon2

sometimes i feel ive lost my mind, the truth of my identity i just cant seem to find, buried deep in the sea lies my true self, but i bury it deeper trying to gain recgonition and wealth, ive put who i am on the very top shelf, and dusted off the identity of everyone else, ive shot a hole through my soul, im my charecter but play a someone elses role, in my eyes i cant just see, everyday i look in the mirror and wonder if its really me.

pete 21-Sep-06/5:30 PM
know the feeling :)! ... reads like it should be spoken over beats. If not, i'd introduce more rests and split some lines into 2 or 3 .....




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