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To be alive (Free verse) by nightowl To be alive.
To see the sky with clouds of white.
To hear the birds speak in joyful delight.
To feel the sun shine on my face.
To feel my eyes squint in its warm embrace.
To smell the sweet cool morning air.
To smile and know that someone special is there.
To be alive is much more than we know.
So I thank God deeply for this great gift to behold.
Up the ladder:
Tomorrow's Dance
Down the ladder:
When the muse calls.
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Posted: September 14, 2006 7:35 AM PDT; Last modified: September 14, 2006 7:35 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.7913947 Overall Rank: 11247 Comments:
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Dovina @ 12.72.42.250
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14-Sep-06/11:32 AM
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A greeting card kind of poem. It seems too oversaid to be impressive.
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nightowl @ 196.25.255.210
> Dovina
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15-Sep-06/8:09 AM
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Greetings Dovina! Thanks for your comment. When I wrote this poem I was very inspired by life and those things I was experiencing. So it might be oversaid or not even well said but I still like it. ') So what would sugggest? x
nice thought, shame about the words
hmm... couplets, hallmark style. on first glance it seems a bit childish as a composition, but i like the easy rhyme within and the half rhyme at the end.
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