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Im different so what? (Free verse) by xblackstarsx Keep Staring, i might do a trick
I dont really care what you think
Wow, i wear clothes and bracelets just like you
and i wear black, Whoop-dee-do
Oh my, you called me a Freak
ouch that hurt, no actually it was really weak
I may be kewl I may be Lame
but you dont talk ot me what a shame
Everything i do is stupid and dumb
Atleast i have fun, when your being a bum
I could go on for days on how you treat us
but i'll stop no because i must
Up the ladder:
L.O.V.E.
Down the ladder:
Blah Blah
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 3.2608695
Posted: September 13, 2002 9:40 PM PDT; Last modified: September 13, 2002 9:40 PM PDTWeighted score: 3.29215 Overall Rank: 13623 Comments:
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pete @ 194.222.69.43
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14-Sep-02/12:20 AM
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wouldn't worry about them ..... fuck 'em ! ...... 4
I have a motto...don't use puncuation at all or at least try to use it correctly. Why have commas, but no periods? Why have capital letters, but not capitalize I? Kewl? Should one take you seriously? Would a read over before you hit submit be asking too much? (Atleast) This piece is "Lame"...
This sounds like a rant. Not to do with poetry, but anger. It looks hurriedly done and slapped together.
Not capitalizing I - i - is an affectation. You must proofread or no one will take you seriously. I understand your rage - but present it boldly done, and seriously done. Spelling such as, Kewl always turns me off. Use the English language, we all know what cool is. Harness your emotions into well done form and they can give heft to your work.
looks like typos intentional. Childish (meant to be?)
I'll stop "now" - instead of no?
I assume this is intended to be illiterate childish rubbish in which case it succeeds. So 10/10 for beng worthless and puerile; 0/10 for anything else.
Is this bad intentionally or are you just a moron?
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