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Im different so what? (Free verse) by xblackstarsx

Keep Staring, i might do a trick I dont really care what you think Wow, i wear clothes and bracelets just like you and i wear black, Whoop-dee-do Oh my, you called me a Freak ouch that hurt, no actually it was really weak I may be kewl I may be Lame but you dont talk ot me what a shame Everything i do is stupid and dumb Atleast i have fun, when your being a bum I could go on for days on how you treat us but i'll stop no because i must

Sisterwolf 28-Dec-05/11:21 AM
This sounds like a rant. Not to do with poetry, but anger. It looks hurriedly done and slapped together.
Not capitalizing I - i - is an affectation.
You must proofread or no one will take you seriously.
I understand your rage - but present it boldly done, and seriously done.
Spelling such as, Kewl always turns me off. Use the
English language, we all know what cool is.
Harness your emotions into well done form and they
can give heft to your work.




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