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Free verse № 15047

Spellbound

Member since 2002 · Posted 13 Sep 2002 · Edited 20 Sep 2002 · 5 comments

Affected by the molten glow Cast by the sun as it rose I stare at the improbable snow As it floats and coaxes me From the pensione I gatti, the cats, eye me green And when I leave the sheltered eaves Follow, howling, down the street A parade of tails and chirruped wails Entreating me Mi amore, he awaits Anticipates Across the bridge And I am late But the colors here The shimmering air Here in the square I stop and stare Forget to care About my date Feeling pulled and chased and needed I stop and sigh with naught completed Feel the earth beneath my feet The cobbles here, this ancient street Beat with me as I take a pause Recall an old forgotten song And see the reason I belong Yet, still one lovely has pursued me A feline escort, rumbling smoothly Weaving pleased between my feet Leaning all his weight on me Tempting me beseechingly Speaking pleasure without words Of present, presence undisturbed By contracts, houses, vows and things My hand, this morning, without rings Without the conflicts two will bring Afloat and free, this hour sees me The petals drifting from the trees Softly brush my brightened cheek Like fingertips, no words to speak Wake me from my dreaming here And I hear laughter, I hear prayer, I hear songs sung in the air And so I start back towards the chapel Straighten this dress, Smile at the dappled Sunlight painting change on me Color me into this portrait of life I shall be simple, an honest wife Gold will tell others the words we have said Promise me, promise me, and come to my bed This is our beginning, this is our start In sunshine, in springtime, and joyous of heart

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[6] pete 14-Sep-02/12:01 AM Reply
Gold will tell others the words we have said ..... no comprendo .... the rest has definitely got something , shows feeling and thought ..... your feline escort is plural , is that condensed into your one lover ? ... 6
[n/a] Limness › pete 20-Sep-02/8:40 AM Reply
I have edited it pete. Is it clearer now?
[10] ifni 17-Sep-02/8:49 AM Reply
Not only a beautiful sentiment, but flawlessly executed as well.
[7] eviltwin 20-Sep-02/4:05 PM Reply
i love the rhythm of this piece. it's excellent.
[6] god'swife 22-Sep-02/5:11 PM Reply
It's good from middle on (sans cats). Last stanza best of them.