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Inside (Other) by Jagang Desperation inside
Like a pile of snakes
Slithering and coiling
Hissing for attention
In a field of beautiful flowers
Loneliness inside
Like a sea of endless flame
Burning with the suffocating
agony of my life
Sorrow inside
Like an abandoned child
Searching through the broken
pieces of his shattered dreams
Up the ladder:
Because to Live I Must
Down the ladder:
Presence Of Life
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Posted: September 13, 2002 9:00 PM PDT; Last modified: September 13, 2002 9:00 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.706401 Overall Rank: 11965 Comments:
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pete @ 194.222.69.43
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14-Sep-02/12:28 AM
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is you xbsx ? or the new beat generation emerging ? ..... do i care ? ..... 2
i like how you throw the "his" in at the end. takes the attention off of you. 7/10.I
Kill yourself. Pleeease. Believe me, the world would be better without you and no one would miss you.
nice
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