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Because to Live I Must (Free verse) by TLRufener Father do not forgive me
Because to live I must sin
This story is quite lengthy
With the main points I will begin
You may have confirmed my words
But you can never have my heart
Youâre devoted to your precious god
Our beliefs are worlds apart
The part I always play
Is just a thick façade to the truth
I have chosen my own path
One in which you will not approve
On this the day of Sunday
In which I was confirmed
I am in the state of mortal sin
At least to what you have learned
Alone at night I cast my spells
I do not pray to your Jesus Christ
My heart lies with the old ways
But my family would never see it right
Because to live I must hide
Or be faced with the desertion
I must remain a Closet Witch
Until I have the courage to pull back the curtain
Up the ladder:
men lie and girls buy it
Down the ladder:
Inside
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Posted: July 5, 2005 9:36 AM PDT; Last modified: July 5, 2005 9:36 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.713913 Overall Rank: 11969 Comments:
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Bankrupt_Word_Clerk @ 69.231.25.173
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5-Jul-05/1:53 PM
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points for the laugh. what the witch in your poem is really saying is that she/he doesn't really believe in the old ways...or else the curtain would already be pulled away (such is the case with true believers).
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TLRufener @ 66.188.122.190
> Bankrupt_Word_Clerk
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5-Jul-05/2:49 PM
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The Witch is hiding from her family. She is a closet Witch. The reference to the curtain is her revealing her true beliefs to her family and friends.
I think you're giving too much away here. I'd shorten it and make it more abstract.
A trip to Salem, you must take.
All the words melt together in an unappealing stew of a novice Witchâs brew.
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