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Slice Open My Body (Free verse) by TLRufener
Slice open my body And tear out my heart You have already Torn out my heart Ground my bloody corpse Into the dirt Since I’m already dead I know it won’t hurt My entire heart and soul Belonged to you And you just left me alone Like I knew you would do Ever since the day I proclaimed my love You treated me like I was an old torn up glove Never once did you Really care about me You were the one who pushed Me off the cliff into the sea

Up the ladder: Time Will Change
Down the ladder: men lie and girls buy it

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Arithmetic Mean: 2.6
Weighted score: 4.713913
Overall Rank: 11967
Posted: July 9, 2005 9:45 AM PDT; Last modified: July 9, 2005 9:45 AM PDT
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[4] Bankrupt_Word_Clerk @ 69.231.18.104 | 9-Jul-05/11:25 PM | Reply
I would change the first two lines a little.
I'd write something like

"I'd tell you to slice open my body
and tear out my heart,
but you already have."
[1] Bluemonkey @ 170.141.68.99 | 11-Jul-05/11:39 AM | Reply
boo. You can and have done better.
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