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3-Sep-02/7:29 AM |
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why brazen? aren't you interested in improving? did you spring full-formed and perfect from the brow of a god? your language is awkward and overfull in this piece. it is not good the way it is. i'm happy for you that you are happy with your writings the way they fall out of your fingers; i wouldn't want to meet your ego in a dark alley, though.
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| Re: To Diana, five years away by kawakurdi |
31-Aug-02/4:50 AM |
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the words themselves ache with the loss.
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| Re: Come tonight I'm waiting by kawakurdi |
30-Aug-02/8:23 PM |
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your words are alway like the wind in the trees to me, gently reassuring, although i hardly ever feel what you have felt. still, there is a warmth to their tone that is inescapable. i rarely comment, because i only begin to understand. you have your own ocean.
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| Re: you're never alone by nentwined |
30-Aug-02/8:11 PM |
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no deeds, only mad thoughts without gender.
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| Re: Billy Bytack Forces His Children To Sell Jesus by horus8 |
30-Aug-02/7:51 PM |
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you give too much away, here. so sayeth i.
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| Re: Intense Irrational Realities by Venus |
30-Aug-02/1:56 PM |
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de nada. glad i could help.
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| Re: Anna N. Smiths vagina monologue in Evangelistic tongues by horus8 |
30-Aug-02/1:22 PM |
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howzabout that audition? yeah or nay?
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| Re: Same by <~> |
30-Aug-02/1:20 PM |
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i have to thank doylum for that inspiration. he was complaining about his bruised plums...and, not wanting to dwell on that thought, i asked myself, what else is plum? and the ever-loquacious mrs g helped me peel it down to where it is now. have you ever seen the sea, here in the east, h? especially in maine? so very different from your left coast wash.
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| Re: Award shows make my cock hard, but you don't by Bachus |
30-Aug-02/11:56 AM |
h-congrats on the other stiff you got of late. i may or may not be around later--so many social engagements, so little time, but weel catch up soon, k?
give em a stiffie at the audition, just for me. z
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| Re: "The title is overused!" by vulcan |
30-Aug-02/8:16 AM |
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this language suits you. this does not feel forced; it is easy to read, and i can tell you enjoyed writing it. more like this, please
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| Re: she is... by Sapphire |
30-Aug-02/7:57 AM |
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she sounds tempting and delicious. i don't think you need 'had' in the first line.
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| Re: take me back home again: by Sapphire |
30-Aug-02/7:52 AM |
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| Re: Ionic Winter by david |
30-Aug-02/7:49 AM |
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find yourself a summer girl, and let her aphrodesiac warm your heart, so that it never again worships at that cold temple
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| Re: Tanka by Service |
30-Aug-02/7:44 AM |
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sweet. pure. so very necessary.
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| Re: An Introduction by 1Sapphire1 |
30-Aug-02/7:27 AM |
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i want this to be something else. why on earth would i need a teddy bear? wisdom from fluff? sorry sapphire, i don't buy it. i'm almost willing to, but you don't convince me.
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| Re: Award shows make my cock hard, but you don't by Bachus |
30-Aug-02/7:23 AM |
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my eyes bleed, watching awards shows. are you perhaps giving the command, make my cock hard, since the show itself is not work the electricity wasted on it? i'd rather be screwing than watching these, that's for damn sure. 7, for making me laugh, big finale.
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| Re: Anna N. Smiths vagina monologue in Evangelistic tongues by horus8 |
30-Aug-02/6:58 AM |
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sometimes, i fucking hate you because you make my brain hurt. sometimes i love you as the god your name belies, 'cause no one but a god could make me feel like this inside. mostly, i save you for late at night, when i'm all alone, the only one left awake, and i call you up, and savor your words, let them wash me with now-told worlds i didn't imagine, and drown in the light they shine in my eyes. churned up inside over the riddles and twists, it takes a late and lonely night to swallow these whole. fuck you h. fuck you and thanks. your bosomed buddy, z.
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| Re: Cancer Haikus by poetandknowit |
30-Aug-02/6:49 AM |
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p&k, these are bare-bones beautiful.
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| Re: Senses of Time by searching |
30-Aug-02/6:43 AM |
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why did you delete my comment?
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| Re: Night scene by unknown |
28-Aug-02/6:28 AM |
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okay, so this one is strays from the former flock. how about 'locked to the bed by silver chains'? rolls out, smooth sadism...
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