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Evening (Free verse) by Tchur
Blackberry wine resting in gold glasses Silent candles all in a row Red walls turned black in the night Warm touch of human bodies Hands resting in open palms Fingers weaving together Love-light kisses on cheeks and lips Hair stroked and brushed away Faces close on down-deep pillows Arms encircling, clinging Breaths' perfume mixed together Deep silences in deep eyes Teeth printing petals on white throats Soft moans of loving pleasure Arms clutching closer yet Lips meeting and tongues dancing Silence rescuing desire Closeness lost in different worlds Departure in cold blue morn.

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.2
Weighted score: 4.7854347
Overall Rank: 11291
Posted: August 21, 2002 8:45 PM PDT; Last modified: August 21, 2002 8:45 PM PDT
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[0] god'swife @ 209.179.134.216 | 21-Aug-02/11:18 PM | Reply
do you read poetry?
[n/a] deleted user @ | 23-Aug-02/8:18 PM | Reply
Certainly. Do you watch snuff films?
[n/a] <~> @ 24.44.185.41 | 23-Aug-02/8:38 PM | Reply
you out-clevered us by deleting those comments, t-chur. is that today's lesson? censorship of those whose opinions differ from yours?
[n/a] ==Doylum @ 213.122.42.179 | 23-Aug-02/8:46 PM | Reply
yes let that be toadys lesson. Tommorows lesson shall be how to get angry at those who don't like you poems. The day after we shall concentrate on upseting little scrots, and the day after shall be spelling. I shall not be present on spelling day for i am ashamed to say i cannot and willn't spell correctly
[n/a] <~> @ 24.44.185.41 | 23-Aug-02/8:50 PM | Reply
and next weak we shall deel with teechurs who set a bad example.
[n/a] ==Doylum @ 213.122.112.106 | 23-Aug-02/8:56 PM | Reply
how shall they be dealt with, will it be with axel grease and savaloys , will the beards upon the bottoms be singe-d about with electric gas oven starters. Please please
[n/a] deleted user @ | 28-Aug-02/1:41 AM | Reply
Look, dammit, I suddenly realised snuff films would be funnier than normal porn, so I decided to change my comment. But since you had already responded, I needed to delete those two. My point wasn't to censor you but to make it make a bit more sense. Anyhow, the whole point behind that comment was the fact that god's wife's question seems ridiculous. I like, read and write poetry, certainly. If asking me whether I like reading it is some way of criticising, why don't you come out and criticise in a more obvious manner. Maybe I'm just obtuse. I mean, what's the point behind that question? That if I read poetry it would be better? That if I read poetry I'd realise I'm not in style (as if I actually cared)? That if I read poetry then I'd realise nobody else writes like that? Well, I'm very sorry, but others do write like that and if they didn't, then I think it would be a compliment to me as it woul dmake me original
[6] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 28-Aug-02/3:13 AM | Reply
look what i come home to. you all must burn..slow and\ hot. enjoy. your ensure. butterpecan. mow!
[n/a] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 28-Aug-02/6:23 AM | Reply
easy. easy. yes, comments have been sarcastic recently. it happens. i did not appreciate the censorship, perceived or real. i see it was not intentional; fine. but your poems all sound the same. diversify?
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