DetailsThe poem, its numbers, and the conversation.

Evening

Member since 2002 · Posted 21 Aug 2002 · 9 comments

Blackberry wine resting in gold glasses Silent candles all in a row Red walls turned black in the night Warm touch of human bodies Hands resting in open palms Fingers weaving together Love-light kisses on cheeks and lips Hair stroked and brushed away Faces close on down-deep pillows Arms encircling, clinging Breaths' perfume mixed together Deep silences in deep eyes Teeth printing petals on white throats Soft moans of loving pleasure Arms clutching closer yet Lips meeting and tongues dancing Silence rescuing desire Closeness lost in different worlds Departure in cold blue morn.

Rate it

0 is the worst, 10 the best. Pick a number, add a comment if you like, then send it. Keys: 0–9 pick, Enter sends.

mean 3.20 weighted 4.79 rank 11274 views 114 View voting details →

5 votes so far. Yours would make 6.5 votes so far

9 comments

[0] god'swife 21-Aug-02/11:18 PM Reply

do you read poetry?

[n/a] deleted user 23-Aug-02/8:18 PM Reply

Certainly. Do you watch snuff films?

[n/a] <~> 23-Aug-02/8:38 PM Reply

you out-clevered us by deleting those comments, t-chur. is that today's lesson? censorship of those whose opinions differ from yours?

[n/a] ==Doylum 23-Aug-02/8:46 PM Reply

yes let that be toadys lesson. Tommorows lesson shall be how to get angry at those who don't like you poems. The day after we shall concentrate on upseting little scrots, and the day after shall be spelling. I shall not be present on spelling day for i am ashamed to say i cannot and willn't spell correctly

[n/a] <~> 23-Aug-02/8:50 PM Reply

and next weak we shall deel with teechurs who set a bad example.

[n/a] ==Doylum 23-Aug-02/8:56 PM Reply

how shall they be dealt with, will it be with axel grease and savaloys , will the beards upon the bottoms be singe-d about with electric gas oven starters. Please please

[n/a] deleted user 28-Aug-02/1:41 AM Reply

Look, dammit, I suddenly realised snuff films would be funnier than normal porn, so I decided to change my comment. But since you had already responded, I needed to delete those two. My point wasn't to censor you but to make it make a bit more sense. Anyhow, the whole point behind that comment was the fact that god's wife's question seems ridiculous. I like, read and write poetry, certainly. If asking me whether I like reading it is some way of criticising, why don't you come out and criticise in a more obvious manner. Maybe I'm just obtuse. I mean, what's the point behind that question? That if I read poetry it would be better? That if I read poetry I'd realise I'm not in style (as if I actually cared)? That if I read poetry then I'd realise nobody else writes like that? Well, I'm very sorry, but others do write like that and if they didn't, then I think it would be a compliment to me as it woul dmake me original

[6] <{Baba^Yaga}> 28-Aug-02/3:13 AM Reply

look what i come home to. you all must burn..slow and\ hot. enjoy. your ensure. butterpecan. mow!

[n/a] <~> 28-Aug-02/6:23 AM Reply

easy. easy. yes, comments have been sarcastic recently. it happens. i did not appreciate the censorship, perceived or real. i see it was not intentional; fine. but your poems all sound the same. diversify?