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"The title is overused!" (Free verse) by vulcan
1 "The title is overused!" My professor said. Four days, Day and night, Day and Night In light,in Darkness I tried to write A poem that my name immortalizes Bids men before my laurel bough Fall to the ground,immediately bow! "The title is overused!" So my professor said. 2 Out in the street Bacchus found me 'lone, Hands in pockets,scratching my po'm. Only he made a quick bow "Come!Leth-ward we'll go!" There by its shore,I saw Dull-Gazes,Arms-Akimboes, Yielded-Heads,Dancing-Legs Sardonic-Smiles; All detached,disillusioned,dismissed! Big Lies! "The title is overused!" So my professor said. 3 It all happened overnight I saw a girl from behind! Pure-as -snow her legs Seductive her girlish glide. I pressed her hands theatrically "Non sum qualis eram bonae sub regno Cynarae I have been faithful to thee,Cynara!in my fashion!" Thus in melancholy getting too far! A childish cry A slap in the face A gust of blood "Thunder and Lightning!" The girl was seven years old! 4 "Pah,boy!come!I know what you want Your reward lies in the fair house there!" But... I stepped in there Lo!Pure-As-Snows everywhere! Without any theatricall effect I was invited to a bed Saw Purity there stretched Hymean hymn was all could be heard! 5 Overused my title that night Next day could not leave my bed For a week dead sick! For another grave melancholy The day after all these Quite another man. 6 The world is not fair I'm not happy. Women worm-like move God is somewhere asleep. I don't mean to be anything, "The King is a thing... Of what? Of Nothing!" 7 Today the wind has a kindly touch "Lilacs out of the dead land"have fairly bloomed; Yet these things I can hardly watch For My Day is in a mysterious nook,restless entombed.

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Weighted score: 4.9551764
Overall Rank: 8695
Posted: August 29, 2002 12:14 AM PDT; Last modified: August 30, 2002 12:21 AM PDT
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[9] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 29-Aug-02/11:22 AM | Reply
horus8 FANTASIMAL ORGASIM IN THE NAME OF ALL THAT'S BACCHIAN AND TITILATING award for poetry. throw banannas at it until the monkey head snaps. i snapped. the g-sting. dollar bills flew around like canon fodder.9/10I
[9] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 30-Aug-02/12:26 AM | Reply
is nothing. you okay. maybe. okay.
[9] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 30-Aug-02/12:45 AM | Reply
not the poem freak. you. how r u feeling? that's all! jesus...be polite and every gets defensive.
[8] Christof @ 195.172.133.226 | 30-Aug-02/2:29 AM | Reply
Section 3 is pretty damn amazing. The rest of this is great too - you are a psychosexual maelstrom, and no mistake. All power to whichever elbow most suits.
[n/a] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 30-Aug-02/8:16 AM | Reply
this language suits you. this does not feel forced; it is easy to read, and i can tell you enjoyed writing it. more like this, please
[n/a] vulcan @ | 30-Aug-02/9:12 AM | Reply
Thanks zz!
[0] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 29-Nov-02/2:04 AM | Reply
now see..i hate your fucking guts you fuckin ponpous shit worm, nut i'll also give credit were credit is due 10!...just kidding 0.
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