Comments byRanger, 1501–1520 back, including replies. Only comments on poems

on After Fighting (More Blood Edit) by zodiac 28 Jan 2006, 5:10 AM
There's an anger that this doesn't quite release in its current form. I'd have liked to have seen it as prose, but I shall have to content myself with being sonneted about the face and neck. Vicious, nearly violent.
on The Heart of a Man by Queen of Tease 28 Jan 2006, 5:04 AM
Errm, is this meant to be serious? Not a bad poem, but I can't tell if you're having a laugh or not...
on In praise of racism by INTRANSIT 28 Jan 2006, 4:54 AM
Demon opener! Didn't get the last clause, but I'm a bit slow at the moment. The rest is a grand take on human failings.
on Tree of Life by ALChemy 28 Jan 2006, 4:48 AM
It makes me wish I'd seen such a scene in my life.
on The copper man and Labrador by Caducus 28 Jan 2006, 4:45 AM
Awesome stuff, I don't care if no vagrant owns a Labrador, to him I expect it was one. Wonderful poem.
on Oblivion by Sway 28 Jan 2006, 4:35 AM
Not bad, unoriginal though. You've evidently got the imagination to better this.
Hint of the day: rhyming 'love' with 'above' (or 'dove') wil turn a lot of people off straight away.
on Him. by Sway 28 Jan 2006, 4:32 AM
Having read "You." before this one I thought they'd be parts of the same story...am I missing something obvious? Very angsty but a lot better done than most.
on Our Marriage by amanda_dcosta 28 Jan 2006, 4:27 AM
I'm not convinced by the last section...the poem's more compelling when you're telling me your experience rather than overtly trying to convince me. Still worth a 7, I shall remember to check any edits of this piece.
on Malice In Wonderland (edited) by Caducus 28 Jan 2006, 4:23 AM
Another good idea from you, Master C - I do like DoubleU's suggestion, maybe make Alice be the cause of the other characters' fall from grace? Although having said that, the poem (as it is) gives a really nasty feeling of Alice's confusion, but I think that it's potential at the moment. With time it'll realise that potential. 7 for now, I will have another look at this later.
on How small, this sleeping tiger by ecargo 28 Jan 2006, 4:15 AM
Yes, I like this.
on The O&E Remix by writeleft 3 May 2005, 2:29 PM
Awesome, I love this poem! Maybe the last stanza is slightly detached, but to be honest I'd be lying if I said it made any real problems. 10
Absolutely marvellous, squire.
on Next time by Billy Fights 3 May 2005, 2:29 PM
Im surprised you classed this as a pimple - its far better than that, and the mere utterance of said spotty poetry turns a lot of people here off. 9
on Grandma and Grandpa by jessicazee 3 May 2005, 2:29 PM
Neatly worked, although it seemed to suddenly shift pace in the middle of the 2nd stanza. intentional perhaps or am i being a fool? 8
on Actor by horus8 3 May 2005, 2:29 PM
creative, I like the initial loose rhyme. 'I was hoping for a thin Val Kilmer'...certainly sir. 9
on The Instructor by Alizarin_Crimson 3 May 2005, 2:29 PM
dosh?
on Breakfast by James Rykelangeli 27 Apr 2005, 9:59 AM
First 2 stanzas are very clever and quite amusing, after that you try to be too clever...let's face it, most people will think you've made a typo when you say 'cresset of the moon'. Or maybe it's just me. Maybe I'm simply retarded.
predictably enough this has been voted on...
replying on Gaping Hole by sonawrote 21 Apr 2005, 1:49 AM
Actually the name Goad seems quite appropriate given the outraged replies to his comments
replying on A new leaf by Damien 21 Apr 2005, 1:46 AM
Tis but a place for gentlemen, where cads and bounders abound not. I believe this place would be owned by Dark Angel.