Sonnet № 133496
After Fighting (More Blood Edit)
There was once you held me in your headlock when
we might have been Madonna & Son - a Descent.
But I reversed: lord, I reversed, and had
my knee down on your neck raining blow upon
blow, until you lopped a fist into
my chest that stilled me a little while I boot-tapped
the street for purchase, our comrades finally
dragging us, still spitting, animal in articulation;
nothing resolved. But, oh, tonight I'm cruising
westward in starlight a straight path I'm making
through olive groves, a rangy dog, jag-hipped,
belly-low. Iâm jowls, gums, sharp canines, outthrust
my shoulders, wringing my big fist by my side.
The grove pours out in a wide whorl of stars,
the long dogjaw of Wadi Araba, Canaan,
and you suckerpunched me, lord. But I reversed,
oh, how I! No fighter, I would have taken
your throat in my teeth and drawn up with my back.
Iâm pissy-sweat-smelling, like a cave, the tinfoil
taste of blood in my mouth. Tonight I'd be
human but oh-sweet-lord how I didn't
relent. Tonight I dig my toes in, pushing
the earth with my strides. The air hums like
applause, stars double and treble. Tonight
I could be Jacob Israel stumbling west
from a whole pit of conquered Dominations.
15 comments
Maybe "wringing" is the problem. I did wonder about that, but decided it was a good enough word for kind of fidgeting my fist around, but not from pain or weakness.
"but Israel shall be thy name. And he called his name Israel."
Has he stopped fighting yet?
I'd change lopped to lobbed.
There's nothing wrong with being atheist
as long as you're not afraid of death.
Perhaps a little rough to follow, but I like it.
Have an eight.
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