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Free verse № 137592

Oblivion

Member since 2006 · Posted 25 Jan 2006 · 4 comments

Oblivion A deep lamenting purple sprawls across the skies Filling the heart, the soul, the mind with melancholy sighs Cherubs soar like little dreams through everlasting love Their wings flutter like whispers soft, to carry them above The stars appear as holes, on the darkened curtain of night Through the holes in the curtain, glimmer bits of Heavens white light Pinkish hues define eternity, dizzying brightness tickles the land My dreams are made of angelic love, Come along and take my hand.

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4 comments

[9] drnick 25-Jan-06/11:28 PM Reply
nice imagery, fuckin beautiful.
[8] ALChemy 26-Jan-06/4:56 AM Reply
Good but common.
[8] amanda_dcosta 26-Jan-06/8:30 AM Reply
Hmmm. Not bad
[n/a] Ranger 28-Jan-06/4:35 AM Reply
Not bad, unoriginal though. You've evidently got the imagination to better this.
Hint of the day: rhyming 'love' with 'above' (or 'dove') wil turn a lot of people off straight away.