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Oblivion (Free verse) by Sway
Oblivion A deep lamenting purple sprawls across the skies Filling the heart, the soul, the mind with melancholy sighs Cherubs soar like little dreams through everlasting love Their wings flutter like whispers soft, to carry them above The stars appear as holes, on the darkened curtain of night Through the holes in the curtain, glimmer bits of Heavens white light Pinkish hues define eternity, dizzying brightness tickles the land My dreams are made of angelic love, Come along and take my hand.

Up the ladder: Walking in a field
Down the ladder: a note on content

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.25
Weighted score: 5.1490035
Overall Rank: 5275
Posted: January 25, 2006 9:51 PM PST; Last modified: January 25, 2006 9:51 PM PST
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Comments:
[9] drnick @ 24.176.22.254 | 25-Jan-06/11:28 PM | Reply
nice imagery, fuckin beautiful.
[8] ALChemy @ 24.74.101.159 | 26-Jan-06/4:56 AM | Reply
Good but common.
[8] amanda_dcosta @ 203.145.159.37 | 26-Jan-06/8:30 AM | Reply
Hmmm. Not bad
[n/a] Ranger @ 62.252.32.15 | 28-Jan-06/4:35 AM | Reply
Not bad, unoriginal though. You've evidently got the imagination to better this.
Hint of the day: rhyming 'love' with 'above' (or 'dove') wil turn a lot of people off straight away.
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