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Tree of Life (Haiku) by ALChemy A lone winter birch
filled with leaves bright red. They sing,
then fly to warm nests.
Up the ladder:
sunset
Down the ladder:
The Fire of My Mind
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Posted: January 25, 2006 11:36 AM PST; Last modified: January 25, 2006 11:36 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.970199 Overall Rank: 8467 Comments:
Does this have to be precicely accurate or correct in matter, i mean about the red/yellow leaves? I wouldn't know the difference. See, you guys are influencing my vote thought now. I might have commented spontaneously but now I keep wondering whether the matter is correct. All the same... its good. Poetic imagery of bright red leaves then it is!
amanda_dcosta: there are birches with red leaves, apparently--I was seeing it through my own geographical filter (where birches with red leaves would be unusual). Does it matter that it's precise, correct? That's for you to decide. For me? Depends on context and purpose--I don't mind poetic license for point or purpose or even effect, but if I read something as literal (I do, too often), then I like it to be pretty accurate. OTOH, I've "leafed" trees in birds, so who am I to judge?
Tree of Life could be from Genesis and Eden, or it could be the evolutionary tree of species. I go with the latter, but it's vague.
What things appear to be and what they are can be different.
And can we know what they are?
Just the image of seeing a birch in winter that appears to be filled with pretty red leaves and then realizing they're a large flock of cardinals as they fly off.
That's a great scene. Wish I'd gotten it.
It makes me wish I'd seen such a scene in my life.
Odd. Are you saying the leaves fly to warm nests? That's a bit esoteric.
Esoteric is a good word to describe it.
That's usually a sign of a great poem. 290 view(s)
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Pedantic, sure. ;-D
How 'bout a nice boxelder? No one ever writes about boxelders (except maybe Stephen Malkmus).
Still not getting it though. Birds (like cardinals--such winter birds too) seems much too literal. Is your title a clue? If not, maybe it should be.