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Our Marriage (Free verse) by amanda_dcosta Two people in love
Two hearts were wed
A life time together
Fifty years! â hearts set.
I saw them in love
I asked them their secret
What she told me then
Iâm sure neâer to forget.
âItâs Jesus!â she exclaimed;
I stood back in awe.
âHeâs our priority
The first on our charts.â
I scarce could believe
That theyâd build their life
Their head being Jesus
Not husband or wife.
It took me awhile
To digest this news
It was only later
I understood the truth.
Iâve fallen in love
And I am wed,
Seven years by
And our hearts are set.
âItâs Jesus!â, I tell
To all I know,
Who ask for our secret
And want to know more.
Weâve learnt a lot by
Investing our love
In so rich a bank
As Jesus above.
When weâre out of love
And exhausted and cross
He shows us His face
To save us a toss.
He fills us with patience
To know right from wrong
He fills us with trust
Our hearts to sing songs.
He fills us with love
To bear joys and sorrows
All summed up together
Weâve a bright new âmorrow.
So come along folks
And join in with me
To praise God for marriage
In His Trinity!
Weâre husband and wife
With Jesus our head
And for eternity
Our hearts are wed.
Up the ladder:
As the Flowers Bloom
Down the ladder:
To Hate Love Is To Love Hate
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Posted: January 27, 2006 12:44 AM PST; Last modified: January 27, 2006 12:44 AM PSTWeighted score: 4.9403987 Overall Rank: 9111 Comments:
I'm not convinced by the last section...the poem's more compelling when you're telling me your experience rather than overtly trying to convince me. Still worth a 7, I shall remember to check any edits of this piece.
Thanks Ranger. It is because I have something special and great that I am convinced of 'our hearts wed till eternity'. It is something to experience and know for certain.
Ah, well I'm hoping that I've got time enough for that yet!
Sorry, but it sounds like a threesome, and an exceptionally sweet and sticky one at that.
You've got it Niphredil. It is indeed a threesome. Marriage just aint about two people, you take the third out and your marriage is bound to hit the rocks. Have you ever wondered why there's so much make-break arrangements in marriage these days?Think about this. It might not click now, but only time will tell.
"Come-on-knock-on-our-door
We've-been-waitin'-for-you..."
Aah... Alchemy,...you not married, right?
Right. I dodged that bullet a couple of years ago.
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I'll agree, this piece could be modified like you've pointed out. I'll try doing what I can. Thanks.