Re: The Angel at the arcade (this is actually an 'acne') by scitz	5-Jun-06/9:15 AM
Damnation, I was going to steal this to read aloud at a convention of poets in the hopes of stealing all the glory. You are the master of pimpliterature (not to be confused with pimp literature, something altogether different) and as such will always be awarded tens due to the dictates of the Mediocrity Checkliste. I have to admit, the place missed you, not that I've been around all that much, but still. 90 percent of all the poetry I've read online (mostly on MySpace) conforms to the stylistic regulations of this piece. I've left a few comments with people telling them what they've done wrong, but rarely ever been replied to. However, I'd like to suggest that the definition of a Pimple ought to be updated to include 'Must contain at least one reference to a rose'.
Re: An Invitation From Poetry.com by scitz	5-Jun-06/9:19 AM
If you could read that poem out loud in front of 2500 poets (from 58 countries worldwide!) and keep a straight face you would deserve your $200.00 value! Love the salad idea.
Re: Split Me by Sunny	7-Jun-06/5:10 AM
Hey Sunny, as promised I'm still reading through a couple of your poems although my brain isn't tuned in at the moment. I can see something behind this poem but at the moment it's blurry. I have been pretty tired recently (lots of football etc.) so bear with me. As usual the lines are great to read and well structured. As a general point though, I'd be wary of using words such as 'irrupting' - uncommon words which closely resemble much more widely-used ones. It's just that if the reader doesn't have as wide a vocabulary as you (as is the case with most of us) they're going to be prone to assuming you've made a mistake. I've read enough of your poems to know that you don't make such errors, but a reader who doesn't have instant access to references (i.e. dictionary.com) may be put off unjustly. Well, that's it for now...I hope I start thinking properly again soon.
Re: Camden Gaithright by MacFrantic	7-Jun-06/5:20 AM
Superb. The final line seemed a little off-rhythm to me, or maybe a bit too long. Either way, it shouldn't be too tricky to fix. Also, being stupid as I am, I read it as 'A God accepting is a God deranged'. P.S. - I wrote a paradelle recently. Damn tricky form.
Re: Instructions to a Sculptor by Christof	9-Jun-06/3:35 AM
If poetic Armageddon arrived, and I could only keep one poem out of every one ever written, it would be this one. Line six - 'through' instead of 'between'?
Re: Blessings by amanda_dcosta	13-Jun-06/1:01 AM
Amanda, I can't stop for long but I thought I'd log in briefly to say that I think this is one of the best poems you've posted so far. It has an almost impeccable rhythm (line 24 I think you can afford to lose 'all', and line 27 felt a little short - other than that I have no complaints) which meant that I even glossed over the 'hearts/apart' rhyme without noticing...very rare indeed for me not to see that one straight away. I have to say also that it has a lightness of heart which is ideal for a sunny tuesday morning here. So thank you for the read! Anyhoo, must dash - I'll catch you later, for sure.
Re: You Sang To Me In A Cathedral Chamber by Ranger	13-Jun-06/1:03 AM
Person using Mr. Robins' computer: thanks for the anon zero - I assume it's to get Fraser back on top spot (where he rightly belongs) but you know, you could have just asked ;-)
Re: ODE TO NICHOLAS JONES III by lukehanney	22-Jun-06/4:18 AM
'But I can't read them...I'm diabetic' is probably the funniest thing I've come across this week.
Re: Spongey Disease by lukehanney	22-Jun-06/4:23 AM
I think this poem is about theological discussions on the four horsemens' forums. They certainly leave me that way. Tip-top and tickety-boo.
Re: Plot twist by annadoc	22-Jun-06/4:28 AM
This is fantastic, although I'd have liked fewer questions and more elaboration on those which remain. 'Do nightmares only occur at night...Do only winged creatures and flying machines take flight?' is such a wonderful passage. I don't really know what you could leave out of this despite my taste for fewer questions, nor do I think it needs to be any longer. I really don't know what to suggest. Possibly the wish and dream lines could go, they're the weakest of the lot. I'd also leave out the very first line (is it an alternative title?) In spite of the flaws, I absolutely love this.
Re: A Little War Victim by amanda_dcosta	25-Jun-06/11:42 AM
This is super - I'd get rid of the lines 'I wonder why I was ever born/To feel humanity's wrath and scorn' though.
Re: Money Back by drnick	25-Jun-06/11:45 AM
Great repeating lines, they make this catchy and cool. A bit more punctuation wouldn't go amiss though. How did the year go? The ranker's missed your presence recently, hope things are going well!
Re: Always With Me by fallen_rose	25-Jun-06/11:48 AM
I don't have the time to give my usual full-length essay, but you would benefit from injecting a little of the 'show, don't tell' aspect into your writing.
Re: Lovers east of the Coombe by Caducus	28-Jun-06/2:22 PM
Great use of the limerick format for something beautiful. I think Dovina's got a point regarding the logic in here - the bough itself doesn't blow away. You could easily get round it by making that line refer to the leaves, perhaps "A bough's gold bloom". This is pretty damn gorgeous though.
Re: Late Break by MacFrantic	28-Jun-06/2:29 PM
Other than 'deconstruct' this is excellent. Very tidy indeed.
regarding some deleted poem...	30-Jun-06/12:26 AM
Ah, fantastic. We appear to have lost yet another new user. Brilliant. And we wonder why poemranker's in demise...
Re: COCK by Stephen Robins	30-Jun-06/12:38 AM
Sounds pretty legendary to me.
Re: moving on by Jigg	30-Jun-06/12:43 AM
Typo line 6 - 'were', I think you mean. But the grammar isn't very user-friendly there so it could be that you meant 'where'. Not very clear though. It's pretty much all over the place here, things don't follow too logically. But then I suppose that's not surprising given stanza one. Fair enough, I guess. 'Back of head met brick' is great, but it would have cracked me up if it had been 'back of head met Chewbacca'.
Re: Patio 95 by ecargo	1-Jul-06/12:09 AM
This is extremely effective as a 'waiting-and-foreboding' piece, stanza 2 in particular. 'Flashing mimic bird', 'dark west', 'black locusts'. All excellent. But, dammit, I've used reference to wind & sea in the poem I was going to submit today...I think I'll leave it for a while... All round top stuff as is to be expected and like ALChemy says, I'm glad to see you around :-)
Re: Aristocrats(Madlib for all those shock poets) by ALChemy	1-Jul-06/12:13 AM
I can't even accuse you of not giving me ample warning about this, because you did. And now I have to work all day with this, struggling not to superimpose all the customers I come across onto the scene... Good stuff for a saturday morning chortle!