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The Angel at the arcade (this is actually an 'acne') (Pimple) by scitz
I have fell deep in love, She’s an Angel from the sky above. Her eyes are bluer than the deep blue sea, I’ll drown in you if you drown in me. I met her in the arcade, She was eating a burger and drank lemonade, Our eyes met as I played street fighter, My heart felt heavy but my feet lighter, She was really pretty with long blonde tresses, Wearing one of those crimped low cut kind of dresses, Her boyfriend came over and asked for a fight, She tried to stop him and he slapped her, So I gave him a punch with all my might, And as he ran off he called her a slapper. We walked home together, I wanted it to last forever, We kissed in an alley and I gave her my silver chain, We exchanged phone numbers and I asked her name, She said it was Angel and I said wow, Isn’t it amazing you flew to me now, She said I was sweet and romantic, And that she bets I’m a bit of a flirt, I reacted kind of pedantic, Because I felt kinda hurt. She held my hand and apologized, Like long time lovers we compromised. And I knew she would be the one, The truth was right in front of me, And like the moon it shone. We belong together, And so far have lasted 7 days, 5 hours and 23 minutes, Soon it’ll be forever, because we’re stronger than steel our love is real, that’s the deal. ------------------------ just wanted to do a simone_girard so here goes..... (c) copyright no unauthorized copies. Plagiarizers will be prosecuted

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Arithmetic Mean: 10.0
Weighted score: 5.237129
Overall Rank: 4158
Posted: August 22, 2003 9:37 AM PDT; Last modified: June 5, 2006 8:00 AM PDT
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Comments:
[8] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.182.238 | 22-Aug-03/9:47 AM | Reply
sweet.
[n/a] <~> @ 167.206.181.179 | 22-Aug-03/11:01 AM | Reply
nice. love the countdown.
[2] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 22-Aug-03/4:03 PM | Reply
Feeling okay? Today I auditioned in speedos and when I bent over my hernia popped up my hemhoroid popped over and a baby mouse cried.
[10] SupremeDreamer @ 204.31.163.145 | 22-Aug-03/11:07 PM | Reply
thats one damn good pimple.. crappier than ever.. indeed, its acne.. 10!
[6] fevriere @ 213.232.79.194 | 12-Jan-04/6:08 AM | Reply
I like the style a lot, and wish I had found it carved into a desk.
[9] Lindz14 @ 66.163.7.103 | 2-Nov-05/1:29 PM | Reply
This is deep.....Sometimes you do meet your true love at a young age. Good luck "Scitz" I give you a -9-
[10] Ranger @ 62.252.32.15 | 5-Jun-06/9:15 AM | Reply
Damnation, I was going to steal this to read aloud at a convention of poets in the hopes of stealing all the glory. You are the master of pimpliterature (not to be confused with pimp literature, something altogether different) and as such will always be awarded tens due to the dictates of the Mediocrity Checkliste. I have to admit, the place missed you, not that I've been around all that much, but still.

90 percent of all the poetry I've read online (mostly on MySpace) conforms to the stylistic regulations of this piece. I've left a few comments with people telling them what they've done wrong, but rarely ever been replied to. However, I'd like to suggest that the definition of a Pimple ought to be updated to include 'Must contain at least one reference to a rose'.
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