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Always With Me (Free verse) by fallen_rose She is always with me
in my heart
and my face
She is always with me
when I sleep
and when I pray to the Lord
She is always with me
when I'm sad
and alone
She is always with me
when there is a rainy day
She is always with me
when we had the fun of our lives
She is always with me
when there are problems
between me and her
She is always with me
by holding onto me
with her warm, soft hands
and a glowing heart
of hers and mine
She is always with me
for now and forever.
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Bad night out at jumpin jaks
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Posted: June 22, 2006 11:23 AM PDT; Last modified: June 22, 2006 11:23 AM PDTWeighted score: 4.762871 Overall Rank: 11445 Comments:
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Lifeboatman @ 170.65.128.6
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24-Jun-06/4:22 AM
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poor
I don't have the time to give my usual full-length essay, but you would benefit from injecting a little of the 'show, don't tell' aspect into your writing.
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