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Always With Me (Free verse) by fallen_rose

She is always with me in my heart and my face She is always with me when I sleep and when I pray to the Lord She is always with me when I'm sad and alone She is always with me when there is a rainy day She is always with me when we had the fun of our lives She is always with me when there are problems between me and her She is always with me by holding onto me with her warm, soft hands and a glowing heart of hers and mine She is always with me for now and forever.

Ranger 25-Jun-06/11:48 AM
I don't have the time to give my usual full-length essay, but you would benefit from injecting a little of the 'show, don't tell' aspect into your writing.




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