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Plot twist

by annadoc

Member since 2006 · Posted 21 Jun 2006 · 1 comment

Did It Occur? Do nightmares only occur at night? Do wishes become granted with the last flicker of candle light? Do only winged creatures and flying machines take flight? Is a wish more than a "wish?" Does a dream come true? Have you seen a lemon drop, coffee break; a chocolate kiss, or a sock hop? were you ever there? did you ever exist? A strong, lingering presence, or just a plot twist?

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[9] Ranger 22-Jun-06/4:28 AM Reply
This is fantastic, although I'd have liked fewer questions and more elaboration on those which remain. 'Do nightmares only occur at night...Do only winged creatures and flying machines take flight?' is such a wonderful passage. I don't really know what you could leave out of this despite my taste for fewer questions, nor do I think it needs to be any longer. I really don't know what to suggest. Possibly the wish and dream lines could go, they're the weakest of the lot. I'd also leave out the very first line (is it an alternative title?)

In spite of the flaws, I absolutely love this.