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Face of Iran (Haiku) by Caducus
The electric veils Concealing warheads or watts? Fallout overhead.

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.5
Weighted score: 4.976287
Overall Rank: 8283
Posted: April 13, 2006 7:47 AM PDT; Last modified: April 18, 2006 1:22 AM PDT
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[n/a] Caducus @ 86.141.200.191 | 13-Apr-06/7:49 AM | Reply
Anyone seen Threads?
[8] Dovina @ 70.38.78.229 | 13-Apr-06/9:25 AM | Reply
Why "dust"? Maybe "amps" or "watts"
[n/a] Caducus @ 86.141.200.191 > Dovina | 18-Apr-06/1:22 AM | Reply
watts it is then, thanks.
[8] ALChemy @ 24.74.100.11 | 15-Apr-06/9:00 AM | Reply
I've been telling people since we went to Iraq that Iran was next. All you have to do is look at a map of the middle east to see why. It's not just about oil, it's about having the entire middle east pretty much under our thumb. Afghanistan, Iraq, Iran and of course Israel plus hopefully Jordan means you split the middle east right down the center, sea to sea. Plus, believe me, North Africa would love to start getting some of that U.S. money and this could leave a back door for trading with them. At least that's my theory so far.
Nice haiku by the way.
[9] Ranger @ 86.131.54.123 | 17-Apr-06/2:07 AM | Reply
Smartly written, would have preferred lowercase 'electric', but that's the only suggestion.
[9] Ranger @ 81.158.79.113 | 18-Apr-06/1:30 AM | Reply
Decent edit. I've thought more about this and the double meaning in here is great. I was a bit hasty beforehand. It made me think of those bombers who disguised themselves as women, 'warheads' works really well with this. Damn good thoughts in here, vote increased accordingly.
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