Its a shame no-one read this it deserved some critique. I enjoyed this but my interest started waning on the last 2 stanzas, its a good poem otherwise, why not re submit? heres a 6

Four flies on grey velvet -7

better now s3 is sorted here is your fat lady .....8

Pretty Good -7-

Kicking piece

I love this its kind of eerie very atmospheric -10

Thought this was a bit anonymous on a 1st read but I keep reading it and more reactions follow each time. i will vote soon

I wouldn't say this is particularly poignant or heart wrenching but its faily well told and from the heart so a worthy 7, i too have written of loss (a lot)

Impressive, but why that thing at the end? your poem is moving enough just dedicate it thats a 2 word salute,
Condolences ! -8-

As in most cases where you are concerned - Excellent read 9

Enjoyed this -7-

Oh dear I fear people are going to correct you that u is spelled 'you' and annoying is mispelled also, if your gonna have a go dont leave yourself open for corrections

Shit I feel really stupid, please explain the connection 'HOUSE' has with Sep11?

Blade is back ! that in itself is poetry. This appealed to my Dr Evil side and I'm off to buy a blender, your pal Ranger says you want this zeroed to the point of death well my friend incase hes wrong here is a 5 it deserved an 8 but if you want zero i will oblige just grunt and its yours.

When you read this one cant help but feel quite amazed at how chipped we really are, and dependant on machines, its weakly told in parts and stron gin others but a good subject to pick up on -6-

For a 10 minute piece of poetry its very good, the last stanzas crap but apart from that it works really well, cats are like snakes with fur mine is truly evil. -7-

I was enjoying this until you repeated stanza 3. Its got a good narrative which is interrupted by the 'his might' lines they somehow affect the flow. Anyway It doesnt deserve less than a 6 I'm giving a 7 however.

Desperation drips from the teeth of this gnarling beast, liked the overtones of darkness in this -8-

how rude of me ...9

Did you write this on your travels? its wild and I almost enjoyed it as much as the one where you ripped the guts from the grandfather clock, didnt like the *PIFF* bit, it just fucks the end up otherwise perfect.