| Re: Jingoism saved the wingnut by horus8 |
18-Jan-03/2:01 AM |
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Very original horus, what I liked about this was the munificence of description especially in the opening. Do you write many concretes? . I have to say the line 'God works on his tan whilst sipping margaritas made me stop reading for a moment and imagine the lazy sod sitting by a poolside with mafia angels dicussing how to waste lucifer because 'he has no respect'. Also the soft star lip brush line was neat, One minor criticism was that it had to fucking end. If your gonna turn this into music you'll have to send me a copy-seriously i might whisper a few of these lines to my beau later in bed and say to her 'call me horus baby' your work is diverse and this is up there with the other one you spent quality time on about africa ***9 and three quarters***
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| Re: blues by <~> |
18-Jan-03/1:31 AM |
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IS this about how beautiful things appear until you take a closer look at them and your overwhelmed? or have i made a prat of myself? If not it is how it could be interpreted, my bro scitz agrees.
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| Re: Turmoil by ThoughtfulSoul |
16-Jan-03/1:43 AM |
First off let me say I liked this, the message was sincere and its nice to see a heartfelt rather than academic way of writing about what you did.
However it does read more like a newspaper column than a poem, the last 3 lines have no happily ever after and you have achieved what you set out to do making me reflect on the flaws of human nature. **********8********
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| Re: HATTIE by Nicholas Monson |
15-Jan-03/9:37 AM |
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Nicely done your a superhero of the decriptive. Please oblige me with perusing my work sometime, 'Carry On Nicholas' I can hear the cacle of Sid James in 'Hinnom'. -9-
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| Re: Clever Device? This is how you hunt angels with an Ashton Kirchner dude where's my car tattoo and legos by horus8 |
15-Jan-03/9:00 AM |
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Thats how marketing should be done. Horus I cannot access your frames on your site, I can see your brandoesque eyes but whats a goin on a here?
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| Re: Fuck by Bobjim |
15-Jan-03/7:03 AM |
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if you stand back 10 yards, after a few vodka's I swear you can see a concrete masterpiece of 2 lovers going at it like rabbits on viagra
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| Re: Fuck by Bobjim |
15-Jan-03/7:01 AM |
This will be the wall paper for my bedroom i have printed 1157 copies and my room looks fantastic.
The last line was ideal for the pipe gap under the radiators. I would guess bobjim is a casanova in bed if he is this patient at hand typing he has a lot to offer women everywhere, so i am giving you the Don Juan Da Marco award for home improvements and bedroom skills, genius, can't wait to see the sequel will it be called 'off'
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| Re: A Hancock Fanatic Writes by Nicholas Jones |
15-Jan-03/5:01 AM |
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liked the 'carry on' film references to your ideas of the 2 types of people, and you wove the end quite nicely, not really my shot of vodka but still liked downing it in one. Your work is always polished i'll give you that Mr J. *8*
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| Re: Render. Defunct by Owner of the Sky |
15-Jan-03/4:57 AM |
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boring compared to the other 2 i just commented on, but then i again i dont really get it. -5-
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| Re: Cheap Thrills by Owner of the Sky |
15-Jan-03/4:56 AM |
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Makes me think of a depeche mode song, 'and i dont want to start any blasphemous rumours but i think that god has a sick sense of humour and when i die i expect to find him laughing' -liked the end of this and the ideas behind it, you have your own little world full of overpopulated thoughts - cool -8
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| Re: This Is The Sound of My Heart Breaking by Owner of the Sky |
15-Jan-03/4:52 AM |
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Awesome poem it reeks of grief and your perception of the world, the irony, the injustified fate of life, the weakness of mortality and the decadence of frustration, sarcasm, boredom, the ending is a crescendo of turmoil- I fucking loved this have a 9, i am off to pound my head against a corkscrew listening to 'everbody hurts'
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| Re: flight (a poem written in high school) by Bill Z Bub |
15-Jan-03/1:54 AM |
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I'm cracking up i read your poem and thought exactly what gods wife said, so did you? you smoothie you. By the way this is quite beautiful it enchanted me, you have many sides to your die and most are sixes -9-
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| Re: Thorns of Grace by smlink84 |
14-Jan-03/1:57 AM |
Liked the vibe in this ..8
Check line 3 as spelling error.
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| Re: Fuck the system by which we live by Lucifer |
14-Jan-03/1:42 AM |
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| Re: a comment on 9/11/2001 by MuDvAyNe |
13-Jan-03/3:37 AM |
Yes thanks now i get it. I knew the 9...11 pause thing and knew house is a term in bingo but the mood spoiler I didn't get.
Nice one
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| Re: not even soup by <~> |
13-Jan-03/3:25 AM |
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| Re: a poet in the city by Bill Z Bub |
13-Jan-03/3:19 AM |
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Your seminal work I was captivated and in my opinion deserving of a top 15 place ...easy, well done you have my maximum respect. *10*
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| Re: I gots me a postcard, motherfucker. by <{Baba^Yaga}> |
13-Jan-03/2:57 AM |
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| Re: When she beats me by Win |
13-Jan-03/2:55 AM |
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Quite an interesting read to see the perpetrators affect on the perpetrated, an honest piece told straightforwardly -7-
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| Re: lost love by cherish |
11-Jan-03/2:21 AM |
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