on Dancers of the Night by Teen14
1 Feb 2003, 4:36 AM
pretty much agree with JC some nice imgery here, think the 1st 3 lines of the last stanza needs a re-edit, it kind of goes a bit off there but a good read
on Because The Ground Is Still Frozen by razorgrin
1 Feb 2003, 4:34 AM
My mate has a boa constrictor and keeps frozen rodents for his treats, this was one shaken martini --------------> 7
on Run Forest! Run... by Bachus
1 Feb 2003, 4:32 AM
you are mad...but funny too -7
on The Merry Man by Teen14
1 Feb 2003, 1:29 AM
pretty good but the line has the joy of a 1000 little boys and girls sent a shiver down my spine -7-
on All I Feel by brokenwing
31 Jan 2003, 3:33 AM
that website is actually wrong its ...italatin.com/latin.html
on All I Feel by brokenwing
31 Jan 2003, 3:31 AM
look up 'interlunium' on the net its about the moon. there are some beautiful latin phrases for nature check them out her at...catholicarchives.nd.eu for translation of english to latin.
for expample: falling = caducus
beautiful = endymion (who was a beautiful young man loved by the moon).
It may or may not give you a little inspiration.
Please read tintagiles work hes a great poet who paints the scene enchantedly, i guarantee you'll like the one about the bare breasted maiden beneath the moonlight.
for expample: falling = caducus
beautiful = endymion (who was a beautiful young man loved by the moon).
It may or may not give you a little inspiration.
Please read tintagiles work hes a great poet who paints the scene enchantedly, i guarantee you'll like the one about the bare breasted maiden beneath the moonlight.
on All I Feel by brokenwing
31 Jan 2003, 3:27 AM
The Devil man said it all really. This is the best one i've read of yours its got a bit of imagery and reads quite well, by no means the finished article, was this written spontaneously? if so a re-write may be difficult without those emotions -7-
on Beauty, sleeping by Ranger
30 Jan 2003, 9:59 AM
After reading mucho of your stuff I find this has some choice lines but it needs to woven in parts, I will have a better look and vote tomorrow but imagine britney spears tits being covered up in a woolly jumper and you got this poem, you know the beautys there but you cant quite see it. Anyway apparently ranger we belong to a brit pack? gotta go or she'll be moody
on one moment to the other by nentwined
27 Jan 2003, 8:40 AM
todays best
replying on 9/11 tribute by Caducus
24 Jan 2003, 1:23 AM
Instead of angel how about mortal? on his way to heaven or some secular description
replying on 9/11 tribute by Caducus
24 Jan 2003, 1:21 AM
To ranger / tintagiles. Thanks for commenting on this. I cannot think how to modify the beard thing. Basically i read that a cirrus cloud is shaped like a beard and found the connection with osama, cirrus clouds also travel from east to west so the metaphor seemed relevent but i think i could use it a better way. I know your work well tintagiles, you work well with imagery please pass on any thoughts. Also if i get rid of the angels bit i may lose the poem. I will work on this over weekend.
on Jesus was a necromancer by horus8
23 Jan 2003, 5:36 AM
In every mosque, in every church i can smell the effigys of horus burning (even then we can feel the warmth, see the light) as muslims would say....ahh this is bloody lovely innit, My brother scitz hates haikus but he liked this one, horus your a naughty naughty boy. *9*
on The last day of an old year by poetandknowit
23 Jan 2003, 2:21 AM
I liked this the 1st time I read it and voted 10 heres that vote again, I will however study not glance your work from now now on. (my work is less demanding), we've had our differences but I respect you.
that was my thought whilst reading this and dont ask me why.
reactions are interesting when you read certain poems, this is good in my humble opinion however i do fear votes/comments will be split on this -8