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Snowblind (Haiku) by horus8 Search party rescue
With a detached retina
Find what the wolves left
Up the ladder:
The first time in forever
Down the ladder:
The difference between the two -=Dark_Angel=-'s
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Posted: January 23, 2003 1:13 PM PST; Last modified: January 23, 2003 1:13 PM PSTWeighted score: 6.952777 Overall Rank: 157 Comments:
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Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232
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23-Jan-03/2:05 PM
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neat-o
Get rid of 'with', change 'find' to 'finds' and then you have it. I feel this in my gut. 10.
Tell you what sis...i'll keep that in mind, and make those changes to this haiku, if i include it in my competitive poetry manuscripts for this spring and summer's contests. thanks.
I hate it when that happens!
ozzy!!!
Something about your word choice makes me conjure up images powerful enough to induce nausea. I mean that as a compliment, of course.
Care for some chai to go with the eye and liver omlet? Delicious. 10
Very cool. hey Horus this reminds me of Jim Morrissons poetry you should read it, this is in the same vein (retinal vein that is) *9*
ew :)
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