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It's Over (Lyric) by Jigg Turn on the side light
And let me see
All the things that aren't quite
There for me
Switch off the main beam
And let me know
Conversations in mid-stream
Ruthless words just flow
Show me the night sky
Pitch black, no stars
Then I'll explain why
This heart's all scars
Up the ladder:
the secret life of eyebrows
Down the ladder:
Gloria's Falling Sun
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Posted: January 30, 2003 10:46 PM PST; Last modified: January 30, 2003 10:46 PM PSTWeighted score: 5.384202 Overall Rank: 3224 Comments:
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scitz @ 62.105.88.10
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31-Jan-03/5:51 AM
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Roadkill relationship liked this 8
add a chorus for you have something here maybe -7
Poem was good. I also like the fact that it was lyric, which I'm noticing is pretty rare on this site. The only critizisim that I have is the title. It's very beneith the poem. But all in all, as I said, it's good.
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