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Haiku № 35600

not even soup

by <~>

Member since 2002 · Posted 12 Jan 2003 · Edited 12 Jan 2003 · 12 comments

well past dinner time, dippers spill to a full moon-- hunger carves my thoughts

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12 comments

[n/a] god'swife 12-Jan-03/11:32 PM Reply
The las two lines have individual potential, but together it's obscure beyond recognition.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › god'swife 12-Jan-03/11:41 PM Reply
What's so obscure about it? A PERSON IS VERY HUNGRY. THEY COMPARE THE BIG AND LITTLE DIPPERS TO SOUP LADLES. BUT IN FACT THEY ARE NOT SOUP LADES. THEY ONLY MADE THIS COMPARISON BECAUSE THEY HAD MISSED DINNER. hurrr I understand good
[n/a] god'swife › -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 12-Jan-03/11:51 PM Reply
I guess I've never been hungry enough to hallucinate vast chowder.
[n/a] <~> › god'swife 12-Jan-03/11:59 PM Reply
title also implies soup kitchen, i thought
[n/a] god'swife 13-Jan-03/12:07 AM Reply
How does the title imply a soup kitchen? Being soupless.
[n/a] poemwanker › god'swife 13-Jan-03/2:15 AM Reply
How does a poem imply a wanker? Being brainless.
Also, how can a fluorescent light imply a cabinet? It can't. HA.
[n/a] Caducus 13-Jan-03/3:25 AM Reply
Pro !
[9] UnityMitford 13-Jan-03/7:01 AM Reply
very nice. no soup for you! but there is, actually. 9 swastikas!
[9] hipster flare 13-Jan-03/9:38 AM Reply
sent to bed with no dinner, eh? staring out the window? this speaks to me that way. nicely done!
[8] Nicholas Jones 16-Jan-03/6:57 AM Reply
Very nice indeed, especially the last line; physical bodily processes have their effect on psychology - President Nasser nationalised the Suez Canal because he had toothache, or something. I like soup, especially tomato, but I a bagel for lunch today, which I filled with brie and put in a hot oven for fifteen minutes, and ate with cranberry sauce.
[n/a] <~> › Nicholas Jones 16-Jan-03/7:17 AM Reply
sounds delicious. today, i have some leftovers--stuffed cabbage, and veggies. i am looking forward to them very much. sometimes, food, sunshine, a glass of water, even--these are everything.
[7] nentwined 19-Jan-03/4:09 AM Reply
this I like. "well past dinner time" seems a bit prosaic for the rest in phrasing, but... I like.

and I've never really been comfortable with haikus giving information in the title that is not distinctly said (as opposed to hinted at) in the poem.