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not even soup (Haiku) by <~>

well past dinner time, dippers spill to a full moon-- hunger carves my thoughts

nentwined 19-Jan-03/4:09 AM
this I like. "well past dinner time" seems a bit prosaic for the rest in phrasing, but... I like.

and I've never really been comfortable with haikus giving information in the title that is not distinctly said (as opposed to hinted at) in the poem.




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