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electronically (Free verse) by Quarton
electronic age...electronic brain thoughts expressed...electronically give your opinion...punch the keys proffer your two cents...instantly have a chat...converse with friends hit send button...talk back screen your name please...ferocious kitten sure seems odd...no one seen buy new clothes...cancel the store want no hassle...punch in order pictured on screen...latest in styles insert data...below left border look at cars...forget the lot all models here...press the key no test drive...it doesn't matter owned by granny...just trust me invest your money...we're the firm earn extra cash...click profit button require more info...then don't bother talk to human...dial E.F. Hutton desire a psychic...look no further try the internet...type in conjurer good luck coming...we divine future trust our predictor...you'll be surer need extra cash...never a problem money to lend...name the total filed for bankruptcy...just last week on further thought...try someone local write a message...why even bother too old fashioned...forget the letter transfer words...type in comment immediate response...quicker is better need a profile...punch in request we have info...whatever you desire sexual preference...religious beliefs nothing confidential...just inquire electronic age...electronic brain brave new world...whole new plane neuron delight...neuron pain everything done...electronically

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Weighted score: 5.0
Overall Rank: 7557
Posted: January 7, 2003 6:04 PM PST; Last modified: January 7, 2003 6:04 PM PST
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[9] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.208.106 | 7-Jan-03/6:10 PM | Reply
ITS TWOO! ITS TWOO! Nice job Mr.ton Say, when is Jupiter supposed to pass near the U.S.?
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.86.240.125 | 7-Jan-03/6:48 PM | Reply
too many ellipses...tired theme
the final verse...doesn't rhyme
[9] INTRANSIT @ 152.163.188.7 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 7-Jan-03/7:38 PM | Reply
-=Dark_Angel=-, are you saying these things to counterbalance my comments?
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.86.240.125 > INTRANSIT | 7-Jan-03/7:40 PM | Reply
No.
[9] INTRANSIT @ 152.163.188.7 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 7-Jan-03/7:43 PM | Reply
Jut asking. Thank you.
[9] INTRANSIT @ 152.163.188.7 > INTRANSIT | 7-Jan-03/7:44 PM | Reply
JuSt asking. geez. i can't even spell any more.
[2] RGallet @ 140.186.49.215 | 7-Jan-03/7:59 PM | Reply
...and?? This poem says almost nothing other than that which is obvious. Yes, nothing other than. Keep workin' on it!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!111111
[5] <~> @ 67.84.171.238 | 7-Jan-03/11:06 PM | Reply
q, this seems naive. what is the point of all of this observation?
bitten by the byte? come now. you think beyond this. you have shewn it to be so.

you fall into formula here. if that was your aim: SUCCESS!

if not, scrap most of it and have another go at it.

respectfully speaking.
[6] Caducus @ 62.105.88.10 | 8-Jan-03/4:57 AM | Reply
When you read this one cant help but feel quite amazed at how chipped we really are, and dependant on machines, its weakly told in parts and stron gin others but a good subject to pick up on -6-
[10] vulcan @ 80.242.3.117 | 11-Jan-03/6:55 AM | Reply
I like this one too!not a tired theme as far as it concerns Man and his unchanged state of affairs.we have the examples of electronic comments here too.9/10.I have sent you an e-mail.I like to know your idea about...
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