Free verse № 34323
Tingling
The landscape is dusty this morning.
I scan the horizon, grey is fading to
melon and periwinkle and colors yet
to be named. Looking into my mirrors
the same is behind me. I seem to be
lifting through a hole in the sunrise.
The sun shortly reveals the degree
to which it was hiding and shadows
the rouge and honey waves that lie
before me. I pass some large bird of
prey. Its feathers fanned out, marking
its grave and signaling that its
spirit survived the collision. The noble
sun chases me and my joints ache so
I succumb to the chase while not
losing the challenge. Easing the
truck into a restful place, I climb
down from my perch. My cheeks absorb
the cold air as I walk to relieve
the tension. On my way, hearing some-
thing I've never heard before, I pause,
and listen, and turn just in time to
see a bronze tree frond fall gently
to earth amongst its brothers and
sisters. Perhaps the leaves
were tingling as well.
17 comments
absorb the cold air as I walk
to relieve the tension" lol. that should be the truck divers theme song and for a chorus you could all *piff* while the leaves dance and shimmy.
Hittin the road today, catch ya if I can.
as it turns an ordinary day into
a piece of art.
Psst..I like the *PIFF*
But I do think the word crimson in poetry should be banned
Other than that good
and signaling that its spirit survived the collision" were great) more than the ending with the falling tree frond. Though I can see how you'd keep it that way if that was the order of events in real life. If you like roadkill stories, check out Ode to a Fox, in my archives.
third stanza line two - 'so' not clear on it's intent. Is it your joints that are aching so - or is it because they are aching you succumb? If the latter maybe a comma after ache?
This poem has a pureness about it, I love it.
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