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Valentine 2 (Free verse) by zodiac
(Captain Cook dies in Kealakekua Bay, Hawaii)
- After which, we know, the Resolution loosed
her carriage guns and muskets on the offending bush;
and perhaps, even then, the crew noted the way
the fan palms, the lush vine-weave, the acanthaceae
bellied like sails, became momentarily more
and more-radiant than themselves as they took shells,
how their crushed-wet smell reached the ship even before
the heat and noise of impact, and were ashamed
to let it stop their work, for Cook was dead.
And perhaps Clerke turning over his dry bones
in a tent pitched on a rock stretch of coast
where death and a small girl watched, fretted, took turns
pressing their dry hands to his forehead, perhaps
he said â to death, the girl couldnât understand â
âIn our absence theyâd made us gods. Whoâd traded
no less than the shipâs iron nails for bits
of skin-touch, native girls.â And then, âEven when
the foremastman died, yes, even when Cook himself
belched at the feast.â And then, âSo absence does.â
Death, nodding in the corner, checked his watch,
tented his fingertips, assumed what he assumed
was the proper expression, perhaps. The girl
touched him again, then hiked back to the camp
with meat and tin, his knife â the usual things.
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Posted: November 30, 2005 1:14 AM PST; Last modified: February 14, 2006 1:58 PM PST
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Forgive my lack of historical knowledge - are the quotes factually accurate, or are they artistic license, zodiac-style?
Other than the last two poems, I've never put words in any real person's mouth except Jesus, who I figure is used to it.