Free verse № 134303
Valentine 2
(Captain Cook dies in Kealakekua Bay, Hawaii)
- After which, we know, the Resolution loosed
her carriage guns and muskets on the offending bush;
and perhaps, even then, the crew noted the way
the fan palms, the lush vine-weave, the acanthaceae
bellied like sails, became momentarily more
and more-radiant than themselves as they took shells,
how their crushed-wet smell reached the ship even before
the heat and noise of impact, and were ashamed
to let it stop their work, for Cook was dead.
And perhaps Clerke turning over his dry bones
in a tent pitched on a rock stretch of coast
where death and a small girl watched, fretted, took turns
pressing their dry hands to his forehead, perhaps
he said â to death, the girl couldnât understand â
âIn our absence theyâd made us gods. Whoâd traded
no less than the shipâs iron nails for bits
of skin-touch, native girls.â And then, âEven when
the foremastman died, yes, even when Cook himself
belched at the feast.â And then, âSo absence does.â
Death, nodding in the corner, checked his watch,
tented his fingertips, assumed what he assumed
was the proper expression, perhaps. The girl
touched him again, then hiked back to the camp
with meat and tin, his knife â the usual things.
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Forgive my lack of historical knowledge - are the quotes factually accurate, or are they artistic license, zodiac-style?
Other than the last two poems, I've never put words in any real person's mouth except Jesus, who I figure is used to it.
By the way I love the differences between the two Valentines.
- After killing Cook, the Hawaiians ate his flesh;
- Clerke, Cook's second-in-command who took the Resolution home after Cook's death, had tuberculosis even then, from voluntarily spending a year in debtor's prison to cover his brother's debt.
That said, I think the two poems complete each other. The secret Gusenberg never reveals is, I don't know, the misspent idealism and absurdity of it and love-death that Clerke is trying to express. That's the Valentine, for the Irish who cares or the native girl who doesn't. Honestly, though, I wish I'd made just one of the poems say that, or something better. Of the two, I think this gets the closest to where I want, with the girl leaving. And here I wish the poetry came out a little more.
I think it's just hard to see the history behind the story unless you know about the original story first and so it loses some of it's impact for those who don't know the history.
With a little research I'm sure I'll be able to appreciate the poem alot more.
with meat and tin, his knife â the usual things.'
And germs too. "Syphilis, gonorrhea, tubercilosis, and influenza arriving with Captain Cook in 1799, followed by a big typhoid epidemic in 1804 and numerous 'minor'diseases, reduced Hawaii's population from around half a million in 1779 to 84,000 in 1853, the year when smallpox finally reached Hawaii and killed around 10,000 of the survivors."
Sorry, I'm deep into Jared Diamond's 'Guns, Germs and Steel' at the moment.
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