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Backwards baby blend (Free verse) by Blade
It stands on the lonely kitchen top, the red juice simmering with friction powered heat. The light flicks on. Slowly, ever-so slowly, large lumps form creating miniture monstrous designs, each joining larger, larger. The features arise to the faceless head of crimson distress, Vocal chords hangin down one by one to form a throbbing vibration of noise filled tension, in the air. Then the torso, Then the legs and, soon soft feet rest gently upon the cool hard razor of dispair in the motorized pit. the baby stops in it's cries as it floats, slowly, softly, ever-so calmly, into its mothers arms.

Up the ladder: Complete.Death.Destiny.

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.571429
Weighted score: 4.6866894
Overall Rank: 12076
Posted: January 7, 2003 3:36 PM PST; Last modified: January 7, 2003 3:36 PM PST
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Comments:
[7] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.208.106 | 7-Jan-03/5:52 PM | Reply
Contrasting hard/soft and cold/warm. Interesting mix indeed.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.86.240.125 | 7-Jan-03/6:45 PM | Reply
For a minute I thought you were watching Brain Dead in reverse, but then I realised it doesn't have this scene.
[10] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 | 7-Jan-03/7:42 PM | Reply
your missing the jejunum. idiot. 10!k
[4] RGallet @ 140.186.49.215 | 7-Jan-03/7:45 PM | Reply
The sea was red and the sky was grey, you're full of AIDS because you're gay.
[n/a] <~> @ 67.84.171.238 | 7-Jan-03/11:12 PM | Reply
spell. forget casting them learn to.
[0] Ranger @ 212.219.142.161 | 8-Jan-03/12:53 AM | Reply
No no, the intention of this poem is that he gets all zeros! VOTE ZERO!
[5] Caducus @ 62.105.88.10 | 8-Jan-03/5:01 AM | Reply
Blade is back ! that in itself is poetry. This appealed to my Dr Evil side and I'm off to buy a blender, your pal Ranger says you want this zeroed to the point of death well my friend incase hes wrong here is a 5 it deserved an 8 but if you want zero i will oblige just grunt and its yours.
[n/a] Blade @ 212.219.142.161 > Caducus | 9-Jan-03/2:32 AM | Reply
Yes everyone must give me zero so that all the averages on my poems become 0.00 to achieve a record as the lowest scoring ever!
[5] razorgrin @ 192.197.142.108 | 8-Jan-03/9:43 AM | Reply
5 because i'm contrary.
[0] cleverdevice @ 212.219.142.161 | 10-Jan-03/3:27 AM | Reply
How do make a baby float?
Take your foot off his head!
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