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insomnia (Free verse) by Bill Z Bub
Still awake. this room is so cold. my eyes must be raw. this single empty room. these tiny blue pills in my palm. a heartbeat. and thunder outside. don't. don't even think it. Lie down, framed by the open window like a camera. And everything is white now. My breath is in my head now. That body in the hallway, that's me. My mouth is open. But I won't scream. Not out loud.

Up the ladder: Haiku for Mum
Down the ladder: Moon (edit)

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.9525743
Overall Rank: 8704
Posted: January 7, 2003 7:14 PM PST; Last modified: July 1, 2006 6:27 AM PDT
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Comments:
[9] famenglory @ 151.205.198.50 | 7-Jan-03/7:17 PM | Reply
wow
[7] RGallet @ 140.186.49.215 | 7-Jan-03/7:30 PM | Reply
This is what happens when your mind wakes up but your body is still asleep. It's a common phenomena, actually. It's stopped frightening me. BTW the secret to a good garlic sauce, as it turns out, is assloads of garlic. Not a lot, or alot, but assloads.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 81.86.240.125 | 7-Jan-03/7:34 PM | Reply
If you removed the first bit and the title, it would be an ace ending to a tale of creeping horror.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 7-Jan-03/7:57 PM | Reply
HP Lovecraft ain't got nothin' on me.
Except of course for his superlative command of English grammar and language. Or some such.
[9] INTRANSIT @ 152.163.188.72 | 7-Jan-03/7:42 PM | Reply
I like it as is. But what do I know
I drive a truck.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 > INTRANSIT | 7-Jan-03/8:13 PM | Reply
Yeah, but I'm a minimum wage slave, and I write this shite. I think its time to become a professional student again.
Poverty is scarier than any ghost story.
[6] <~> @ 67.84.171.238 > Bill Z Bub | 7-Jan-03/10:56 PM | Reply
i really hope those blue pills weren't wellbutrin. really. really.

WAKE UP, DAMN YOU!!!
[9] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.209.77 > Bill Z Bub | 8-Jan-03/6:44 AM | Reply
Copy you I did, driver.
[9] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.209.77 > Bill Z Bub | 8-Jan-03/6:45 AM | Reply
You're a fine hand though, keep up the good work!
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 > INTRANSIT | 13-Jan-03/3:30 PM | Reply
Thanks dude.
[8] Caducus @ 62.105.88.10 | 8-Jan-03/4:44 AM | Reply
Desperation drips from the teeth of this gnarling beast, liked the overtones of darkness in this -8-
[9] Ranger @ 212.219.142.161 | 14-Jan-03/6:34 AM | Reply
Yeah, I like this-it's very good!
[n/a] razorgrin @ 192.197.142.98 | 14-Jan-03/9:25 AM | Reply
terriffic. hp would be happy, despite the lack of shoggoths.
[n/a] Bill Z Bub @ 24.112.224.232 > razorgrin | 14-Jan-03/3:36 PM | Reply
You don't see enough shoggoths these days.
[8] god'swife @ 209.179.211.151 | 14-Jan-03/4:13 PM | Reply
Our bodies shall meet over such a dish.
[8] lastobelus @ 217.226.19.245 | 9-Mar-03/5:48 PM | Reply
fast and good.
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