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Moon (edit) (Haiku) by Caducus
Earth's stone faced widow stares through dark cumulus veils tides eye leaves jewels.

Up the ladder: insomnia
Down the ladder: the nature of our stillborn

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Arithmetic Mean: 4.0
Weighted score: 4.9525743
Overall Rank: 8742
Posted: April 17, 2003 2:38 AM PDT; Last modified: May 5, 2006 1:27 AM PDT
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[8] Ranger @ 62.252.32.15 | 4-May-06/8:27 AM | Reply
Last line I think should be "tide's cataract leaves", however I'm wondering if there's a bit of extra wordplay going on there. Are you using 'cataract' in the 'downpour' sense there as well? Because it sort of feels like you are - particularly with the widow imagery, a woman crying at night maybe?
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