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Moon (edit) (Haiku) by Caducus

Earth's stone faced widow stares through dark cumulus veils tides eye leaves jewels.

Ranger 4-May-06/8:27 AM
Last line I think should be "tide's cataract leaves", however I'm wondering if there's a bit of extra wordplay going on there. Are you using 'cataract' in the 'downpour' sense there as well? Because it sort of feels like you are - particularly with the widow imagery, a woman crying at night maybe?




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