sliver
replying on The Finger of my Mind by sliver
16 Aug 2004, 9:50 PM
All these hits and no more comments? come on!
Damn caity, wasn't worth it at all, was it?
Readit again, out loud, maybe three times.
By the way, I meant the relationship, not the poem.
i liked -8-
sliver
replying on Who are the best poets on poemranker? (A list by me) by Jeremi B. Handrinos
16 Aug 2004, 8:40 PM
ask me if i really give a shit, considering that I came in 34th, and hoarus, bvaba, wharever he calls yourself has given me nothing but a majority of gooose eggs. what da heall,eh?
*8* ^^ i likey
*10* ^^ I understand it Rainy, You still have feelings for Adam, But your in love with Josh, .. you still like Adam, because love doesnt just fade away...I understand..wow mircale..hehe ^^
Another very nice one!
"How about the little blue pill of the protracted night?" JK
To me the center of the poem is:
"And I awaken to the dim hum
of my room's quiet seclusion,
And wonder where she sleeps tonight,
Wonder why our eager joining went so wrong,
Wonder if her delicate sweetness was ever given for free?"
It's never free, but it can sometimes be reasonable. -9-
Imagery reminiscent of Sandburg? Are you a sandburger? -9-
Very well.
I respectfully submit (or re-submit) that the term 'PC' as it's used in America always refers to cliquish whitefolk who are embarrassed about not knowing any real Coloureds and think referring to Females and Homos as Persons will improve their chances of getting laid by one or the other. Anyone who has ever met a Coloured or Homo or spent any time in the company of Females knows this is not the case. In addition, 'PiCs' (or 'Persons with PC', as they would have it,) have historically shown themselves to be frightful racistists, sexistists, dunceistists and generally stuck-up virgin introverts. They laugh at 'un-PC humor' because they think it's genuinely funny and true, so their laughter is almost always a kind of lewd repressed giggle and disgusting. If I've mentioned once on this and similar posts, I've mentioned a thousand times that SupremeDreamer has never been nearer to Deep South than Oakland (cf. the adjective 'cold' used in reference to Mississippi), and that despite coming from a renowned hotbed of political correctness, he has never in his life been correct, to say nothing of politically correct.
cat,
I'm sorry to have been so hard on you before, but your continually saying things like 'friends of the rainbow that is earth', 'prejudice' instead of 'prejudiced', 'semantics' instead of god-knows-what, and other irrational gobbledygook pisses me off beyond belief, for reasons which probably have more to do with my own hopeless gay introversion than your dimness or whatever. I hope you can come to see me as a decent guy who just feels really bad about himself because he doesn't have any friends or something (and so 'takes it out' on 'aspiring internet poets' in rambling anonymous tirades,) and if we ever meet in public, I know you'll think I'm a nice guy with real feelings. Anyway, no hard feelings (I hope!;-p) Thanks for helping to make poemranker all it can be! PS-I read all your poems and you're all aces! -zodiac
and before I forget thanks for the appraisal.
help me out. what erors?
"I still think it's one of my bests."
There you go thinking again.
Unbelievably appalling. I shan't comment further on the poetry, but will give you the following important Life Tip: an apostrophe usually indicates a missing letter(or letters). In the case of "wouldn't", the missing letter is the "o" of "not". That's how you know the apostrophe must be between the "n" and the "t". Not between the "d" and the "n". Demonstrate your understanding by correctly placing the apostrophe in the following words: wouldnt, couldnt, thats, theyre (4 marks)
I still think it's one of my bests.
Move on and seek closure
thanks, this much I-------------------------------I
To the one you hung up on,
This is not bad at all. Surprised? Not being noticed by someone who should care is a very sad feeling. Sometimes the only one who takes notice is one who should not rightly care. Therein lies the gold in an otherwise sandy desert that it's best to get used to.
"existed" "No one"
nice...just nice, keep writing