poemranker ::Bon Voyage by Jeremi B. Handrinos

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Free verse № 59555

Bon Voyage

Member since 2003 · Posted 6 Aug 2003 · 10 comments

Sitting here In this lifeboat with you? For four dehydrated foodless weeks... Has taught me a few things. Like, for instance: Blood only agitates one's thirst, more. You cannot make a sundial out of a sunfish even if you were a boyscout. Storms at Sea spill all water collected during them anyway. Ufo's are seen more prevalently when you're afloat, dying. The Femur is the largest bone in the human body, and very hard to remove while it's still being used. Whether, as a makeshift mast/Calander/ Dayplanner-Rolodex. Or a sunspun lukewarm appetizer. It will leave you thinking as it left me, thunk. "They even got flies out here looking for a free hand out." Aint it a small world after all? Just before it swallows you entirely. Without a trace, or conscious opinion. No Judge No jury Only the sound of your own voice Helping you, Swallow you, down. More energy for the waiting. to be rescued. Less to be appreciated If found.

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10 comments

[10] Lifeboatman 6-Aug-03/4:14 AM Reply
water's good... 10
[9] http://mulberryfairy 6-Aug-03/6:37 PM Reply
Well written and funny. I wasn't sure about this
"In this lifeboat with you?" second line's question mark. Was that because you weren't always "with" the person? Maybe it should say "In this lifeboat with (?) you" because it is definitely not a question.
[7] Signature 21-May-04/1:01 AM Reply
Unique
[10] Venus 27-Jul-04/7:54 PM Reply
yeah, i feel this one
[6] electroman1979 27-Jul-04/9:04 PM Reply
makes me hungry
[10] frdup717 30-Jul-04/3:50 PM Reply
very
good
i
like
it
[10] INTRANSIT 31-Jul-04/8:45 AM Reply
Obviously, your best.
[10] leonxic 3-Aug-04/5:48 AM Reply
Hah hah hah; real fucking funny. Seriously.
[8] FadedHappiness 16-Aug-04/4:37 PM Reply
*8* ^^ i likey
[0] mr cunt 2-Mar-07/5:59 PM Reply
To say this was a great poem would be not so much an understatement but more of a blatant lie. It is pretentious shit and your pen name is truly common and nerdy. You must be a total cunt.