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Free verse № 18540

Down Home

Member since 2002 · Posted 2 Oct 2002 · 8 comments

Driving past a sawn-sided shack with red roof running down fast and sloping out like the weather cut it into the hushed green hillside, I think of how warm and yellow the light will spill from the window at twilight when the huge blue deepens down the hollow, and night finally comes on home

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[3] DreamMachine 2-Oct-02/5:34 PM Reply
A sawn-sided shack? A hillside? :::Starts singing..., " Over the river and through the woods to Grandma's House we go...::: Ok but still needs some work man...I don't like to be left hanging and I felt that it was missing something. 3
[7] knickytoy 3-Oct-02/6:29 AM Reply
Ireally like how the words make a hillside!
[9] Christof 3-Oct-02/7:38 AM Reply
A different colour with every line - the effects really accumulate - smashing
[8] Nicholas Jones 4-Oct-02/7:16 AM Reply
I'm always a sucker for poems where the form is linked to the meaning. Dylan Thomas wrote a poem called 'Vision and Prayer' where the stanzas are in diamond and hourglass shapes.
[n/a] <~> › Nicholas Jones 4-Oct-02/7:22 PM Reply
Nicholas, as p&k has pointed out, i am 'the writer of triangle poems'. may i suggest you read my poems 'diminishing' and 'love song'? thanks, z
[n/a] <~> › <~> 7-Oct-02/8:32 PM Reply
Ninoy_Instigator deletes comments, in caase anyone cares/
[7] horus8 4-Oct-02/1:52 PM Reply
that's like hosing off the <concrete> in my book...my book of 'opening squares' for you.h
[10] god'swife 8-Oct-02/11:56 AM Reply
A gem. Your prettiest I think. I love everything about this poem, beginning, middle and end.