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Down Home (Free verse) by <~>
Driving past a sawn-sided shack with red roof running down fast and sloping out like the weather cut it into the hushed green hillside, I think of how warm and yellow the light will spill from the window at twilight when the huge blue deepens down the hollow, and night finally comes on home

Up the ladder: Bon Voyage
Down the ladder: Dumb Ideas

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.6153846
Weighted score: 6.911999
Overall Rank: 213
Posted: October 2, 2002 2:57 PM PDT; Last modified: October 2, 2002 2:57 PM PDT
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[3] DreamMachine @ 66.212.78.246 | 2-Oct-02/5:34 PM | Reply
A sawn-sided shack? A hillside? :::Starts singing..., " Over the river and through the woods to Grandma's House we go...::: Ok but still needs some work man...I don't like to be left hanging and I felt that it was missing something. 3
[7] knickytoy @ 24.45.19.89 | 3-Oct-02/6:29 AM | Reply
Ireally like how the words make a hillside!
[9] Christof @ 195.172.133.226 | 3-Oct-02/7:38 AM | Reply
A different colour with every line - the effects really accumulate - smashing
[8] Nicholas Jones @ 137.44.1.200 | 4-Oct-02/7:16 AM | Reply
I'm always a sucker for poems where the form is linked to the meaning. Dylan Thomas wrote a poem called 'Vision and Prayer' where the stanzas are in diamond and hourglass shapes.
[n/a] <~> @ 67.84.171.10 > Nicholas Jones | 4-Oct-02/7:22 PM | Reply
Nicholas, as p&k has pointed out, i am 'the writer of triangle poems'. may i suggest you read my poems 'diminishing' and 'love song'? thanks, z
[n/a] <~> @ 67.84.171.10 > <~> | 7-Oct-02/8:32 PM | Reply
Ninoy_Instigator deletes comments, in caase anyone cares/
[7] horus8 @ 24.126.113.154 | 4-Oct-02/1:52 PM | Reply
that's like hosing off the <concrete> in my book...my book of 'opening squares' for you.h
[10] god'swife @ 209.178.176.165 | 8-Oct-02/11:56 AM | Reply
A gem. Your prettiest I think. I love everything about this poem, beginning, middle and end.
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