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Down Home (Free verse) by <~>

Driving past a sawn-sided shack with red roof running down fast and sloping out like the weather cut it into the hushed green hillside, I think of how warm and yellow the light will spill from the window at twilight when the huge blue deepens down the hollow, and night finally comes on home

DreamMachine 2-Oct-02/5:34 PM
A sawn-sided shack? A hillside? :::Starts singing..., " Over the river and through the woods to Grandma's House we go...::: Ok but still needs some work man...I don't like to be left hanging and I felt that it was missing something. 3




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