Sleep

Member since 2004 · Posted 9 Jan 2004 · 5 comments

in the deep blue sea of sleep rhythm breath drawn in sighs slow release sit in awe watch the rise and fall breath drawn in sighs slow release perched in silence amazed by it all emotions stirs deep within breath drawn in sighs slow release venus' path never falters breath drawn in sighs slow release rhythm

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[0] titan69 10-Jan-04/12:46 AM Reply

this pome just has no rhythm

[n/a] Shade_dreamer › titan69 16-Jan-04/6:55 AM Reply

Thanks for the honest Apraisal.

[7] deleted user 6-Aug-04/8:03 AM Reply

Ummm... No... There is a definite rythm to this poem.

(There's a couple of errors ;), but definitely rythm :P)

[n/a] Shade_dreamer › deleted user 16-Aug-04/6:36 AM Reply

help me out. what erors?

[n/a] Shade_dreamer › deleted user 16-Aug-04/6:36 AM Reply

and before I forget thanks for the appraisal.