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The Finger of my Mind (Lyric) by sliver
I can feel your silence, in this darkness. I can see your eyes through the night. I long for your whisper of rejection, for the promise of freedom it bears... But, if you do decide to go, leave your outline in these shadows. When the weight of loss presses on my soul, I will trace your memory with the finger of my mind.

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Arithmetic Mean: 8.333333
Weighted score: 6.6666665
Overall Rank: 539
Posted: September 15, 2002 2:05 PM PDT; Last modified: August 16, 2004 9:15 PM PDT
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[8] electroman1979 @ 198.81.26.16 | 16-Aug-04/9:21 PM | Reply
i liked -8-
[n/a] sliver @ 63.189.17.70 > electroman1979 | 16-Aug-04/9:50 PM | Reply
All these hits and no more comments? come on!
[8] electroman1979 @ 198.81.26.49 > sliver | 16-Aug-04/9:53 PM | Reply
my computer says you had 23 comments on this poem
[10] Dan garcia-Black @ 66.218.59.183 | 17-Aug-04/7:47 AM | Reply
Evocative. Good use of dark, quiet images.
[n/a] sliver @ 63.190.80.221 > Dan garcia-Black | 17-Aug-04/9:42 AM | Reply
Thanks Dan. I like to think this is one of my better ones.
[9] Dovina @ 24.52.157.176 | 17-Aug-04/11:16 AM | Reply
Verse 2 is great. The last verse seems trite in comparison.
[8] wilco @ 66.162.22.123 | 17-Aug-04/3:30 PM | Reply
yep, verse 2 is good. I like 3 too, but 2 is better.
[10] deleted user @ 207.200.116.65 | 13-Oct-05/5:33 PM | Reply
Good poem.
That completes it Sliver
10 on all
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