The Finger of my Mind

Member since 2002 · Posted 15 Sep 2002 · Edited 16 Aug 2004 · 8 comments

I can feel your silence, in this darkness. I can see your eyes through the night. I long for your whisper of rejection, for the promise of freedom it bears... But, if you do decide to go, leave your outline in these shadows. When the weight of loss presses on my soul, I will trace your memory with the finger of my mind.

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8 comments

[8] electroman1979 16-Aug-04/9:21 PM Reply

i liked -8-

[n/a] sliver › electroman1979 16-Aug-04/9:50 PM Reply

All these hits and no more comments? come on!

[8] electroman1979 › sliver 16-Aug-04/9:53 PM Reply

my computer says you had 23 comments on this poem

[10] Dan garcia-Black 17-Aug-04/7:47 AM Reply

Evocative. Good use of dark, quiet images.

[n/a] sliver › Dan garcia-Black 17-Aug-04/9:42 AM Reply

Thanks Dan. I like to think this is one of my better ones.

[9] Dovina 17-Aug-04/11:16 AM Reply

Verse 2 is great. The last verse seems trite in comparison.

[8] wilco 17-Aug-04/3:30 PM Reply

yep, verse 2 is good. I like 3 too, but 2 is better.

[10] deleted user 13-Oct-05/5:33 PM Reply

Good poem.
That completes it Sliver
10 on all