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The Finger of my Mind (Lyric) by sliver I can feel your silence,
in this darkness.
I can see your eyes
through the night.
I long for your whisper
of rejection,
for the promise of freedom
it bears...
But, if you do decide to go,
leave your outline in these shadows.
When the weight of loss
presses on my soul,
I will trace your memory
with the finger of my mind.
Up the ladder:
Mermaid at Dawn
Down the ladder:
"Mute nostril agony" Titled & inspired by Frass.
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 8.333333
Posted: September 15, 2002 2:05 PM PDT; Last modified: August 16, 2004 9:15 PM PDTWeighted score: 6.6666665 Overall Rank: 539 Comments:
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electroman1979 @ 198.81.26.16
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16-Aug-04/9:21 PM
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i liked -8-
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sliver @ 63.189.17.70
> electroman1979
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16-Aug-04/9:50 PM
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All these hits and no more comments? come on!
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electroman1979 @ 198.81.26.49
> sliver
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16-Aug-04/9:53 PM
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my computer says you had 23 comments on this poem
Evocative. Good use of dark, quiet images.
Thanks Dan. I like to think this is one of my better ones.
Verse 2 is great. The last verse seems trite in comparison.
yep, verse 2 is good. I like 3 too, but 2 is better.
Good poem.
That completes it Sliver 10 on all 411 view(s)
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