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"Mute nostril agony" Titled & inspired by Frass. (Free verse) by Bachus
God, I rode the mule. Down that twisting gorge, towards some running water. Carrot swung hard and orange. In the sun, is such a thing possible? Under a star like her, anything is. When I smell no evil, hear no buzz following tail swish. I reel in that pointed non fruit for lunch. Then I taste its evil, and my mind.? Swims in that Glacier's run off. The freezing burn of Winter's death. Now pooling for Browns with hooking Eddies. Hooked into that filtered agony, and trying to avoid the stare of my mute jack-ass. I appologize for nothing, but tomorrow.

Up the ladder: The Finger of my Mind
Down the ladder: Hunting God

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Arithmetic Mean: 8.333333
Weighted score: 6.6666665
Overall Rank: 540
Posted: April 17, 2003 10:29 PM PDT; Last modified: April 17, 2003 10:29 PM PDT
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[8] Ranger @ 217.40.231.55 | 17-Apr-03/11:36 PM | Reply
Fabulous, absolutely wonderful! "That pointed non fruit for lunch".
Only problem is 'apologise' (only 1 p)
Have a good day.
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[n/a] OneFingerAnswer @ 216.138.10.3 > Ranger | 19-Apr-03/3:55 PM | Reply
Quit being a Brit. Apologize is a proper spelling. If you can't get over a single letter then take your thumb and stick it in the centre of your arse.
[8] Ranger @ 213.1.45.14 > OneFingerAnswer | 20-Apr-03/1:07 AM | Reply
Excuse me? I have nothing wrong with the z, I was just saying that there's only one p. You seem to have misunderstood the fact that I said this poem's great and just has one typo. Is that a crime?
[n/a] OneFingerAnswer @ 216.138.10.3 > Ranger | 20-Apr-03/2:01 AM | Reply
lol Sorry bout that. I was only joking any way. Cheers.
[8] Ranger @ 213.120.56.37 > OneFingerAnswer | 23-Apr-03/11:30 AM | Reply
No worries!
[8] god'swife @ 209.179.213.119 | 18-Apr-03/2:59 PM | Reply
How the fuck do all those ideas find room in your head? You make it look so easy, I'm always stifling myself.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.212.215 > god'swife | 19-Apr-03/4:41 AM | Reply
"I appologize for nothing,/but tomorrow"...

Beautiful. Simply beautiful. You have simultaneously captured the joy in my heart and the anguish in my bosom, spearing my beauty on rods of fiery ice. 10!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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