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"Mute nostril agony" Titled & inspired by Frass.

by Bachus

Member since 2002 · Posted 17 Apr 2003 · 7 comments

God, I rode the mule. Down that twisting gorge, towards some running water. Carrot swung hard and orange. In the sun, is such a thing possible? Under a star like her, anything is. When I smell no evil, hear no buzz following tail swish. I reel in that pointed non fruit for lunch. Then I taste its evil, and my mind.? Swims in that Glacier's run off. The freezing burn of Winter's death. Now pooling for Browns with hooking Eddies. Hooked into that filtered agony, and trying to avoid the stare of my mute jack-ass. I appologize for nothing, but tomorrow.

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[8] Ranger 17-Apr-03/11:36 PM Reply
Fabulous, absolutely wonderful! "That pointed non fruit for lunch".
Only problem is 'apologise' (only 1 p)
Have a good day.
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[n/a] OneFingerAnswer › Ranger 19-Apr-03/3:55 PM Reply
Quit being a Brit. Apologize is a proper spelling. If you can't get over a single letter then take your thumb and stick it in the centre of your arse.
[8] Ranger › OneFingerAnswer 20-Apr-03/1:07 AM Reply
Excuse me? I have nothing wrong with the z, I was just saying that there's only one p. You seem to have misunderstood the fact that I said this poem's great and just has one typo. Is that a crime?
[n/a] OneFingerAnswer › Ranger 20-Apr-03/2:01 AM Reply
lol Sorry bout that. I was only joking any way. Cheers.
[8] Ranger › OneFingerAnswer 23-Apr-03/11:30 AM Reply
No worries!
[8] god'swife 18-Apr-03/2:59 PM Reply
How the fuck do all those ideas find room in your head? You make it look so easy, I'm always stifling myself.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. › god'swife 19-Apr-03/4:41 AM Reply
"I appologize for nothing,/but tomorrow"...

Beautiful. Simply beautiful. You have simultaneously captured the joy in my heart and the anguish in my bosom, spearing my beauty on rods of fiery ice. 10!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!