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The Finger of my Mind (Lyric) by sliver

I can feel your silence, in this darkness. I can see your eyes through the night. I long for your whisper of rejection, for the promise of freedom it bears... But, if you do decide to go, leave your outline in these shadows. When the weight of loss presses on my soul, I will trace your memory with the finger of my mind.

Dovina 17-Aug-04/11:16 AM
Verse 2 is great. The last verse seems trite in comparison.




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