klosterfobik
on I Can't Move On by Sirens_Voice
15 Aug 2004, 4:39 PM
the ending is good - try a little amending though. -8-
I like it, its really nice and I understand it soo much. Great Job!
The last 2 verses could stand better alone. Try leaving out "it is"
Oops. Dilapidated. Anything else? i could find anything, so.
The last 4 lines are especially nice.
Thanks, M.
Is rhyming all? :-(
How sad...well the typos are changed. As far as you passing out, hopefully it was not on the keyboard, that would be slightly uncomfortable!
Ok, zodiac. Fine to join in. But in future I would ask that you share your opinions with the rest of the group before attacking other opinions. Nobody here would claim to know how to solve all the world's problems; it's important that we work together if we're to make any progress. Sometimes other peoples' opinions are bulging and wallyish, but not always. There are times when we can learn a great deal by viewing an issue from a different perspective, wouldn't you agree? Thanks for listening, and I hope to hear from you soon!
Dear cat,
You've been proven wrong and generally marked yourself as a gigantic dim about a dozen times on this page without your knowing it. Your idea of intelligent argument is attacking nearly everything besides your massive generalizations by calling them massive generalizations, and then hoping some frankly nauseating mixture of logicphobia, specious self-deprecation and general cutesiness will get you out of being called a blundering dim to your face. And you've committed the carnal dim of reading "Could you explain what you mean by X" as "I have no idea what X means in reality". Dim, dim, dim.
PS-You're not PC, since you're patently an anti-PCist, a Britishist, and an internet-userist. You've just been taught that a bunch of things are bad to say about certain downtrodden ethnics and are afraid to think anything else. -0-
PPS-You're totally wrong; richa pretty much hates -=Dark_Angel=-. -0-
PPPS-"Most" isn't a save, it's a qualifier. Only an purebred dim would think it's anything else, but that's because only dims (including most Americans) think mainly in clodheaded generalizations themselves. -0-
Do you sell cars?
It seems like every time there's an argument on this site, you come in with something about "the information processing level" - which, incidentally, strikes me as a load of fluff. Do you find that it's an absurdly easy way out of almost any argument?
most welcome..
I'll be honest...I didn't read it *6*
Now I'll be dishonest...Keanu Reeves is a prolific pioneer of well acted films, and he should refrain from having his vocal cords and face burned/lacerated by chemicals, prefferably in pill form, blue or red. (I love irony)
The Associated Press has declared this one of the best pieces that MacFrantic has ever read. Of course you suckered me in with the ellipsis... *10* Great title!
The Associated Press has declared this one of the best pieces that MacFrantic has ever read. Of course you suckered me in with the ellipsis... *10* Great title!
not too shabby, ok...maybe a bit shabby...but that's good. *8.5*
Like it a lot and that is that *9*
Fantabulactifying! I think. *10*