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Guess the place!

Member since 2003 · Posted 14 Aug 2004 · 5 comments

This city remains, despite the natural laws. This city seems a facade a tinted glass to obscure the dilapdated past. Overcompensation for lacerations earned through size and concentration. It remains indecisive: am i floating or simply allowing a mass/Maas to flow through? Despite bravado, macho demeanor superimposed on fate which happens and happens and cannot unhappen, this city would that it could drift. Would that it could fall amnesiac. Its tinted past glass is somedays turned aquarium. The sun comes in and no out in sight, now reflect, then inward, to preen. It's not asking your approval, preferring your silent, if sticky retreat.

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5 comments

[10] MacFrantic 15-Aug-04/1:14 AM Reply
*10* Take the time to spell check.
[n/a] Patsy 15-Aug-04/3:55 PM Reply
Oops. Dilapidated. Anything else? i could find anything, so.
[10] basit_i 17-Aug-04/10:04 PM Reply
this, i think, goes further than other-of-i-have-seen. the "Maas" makes me want to guess in that direction, but i feel cautious tonight...
[6] Bachus 17-Aug-04/11:31 PM Reply
Is it Uranus?
[10] basit_i › Bachus 18-Aug-04/5:54 PM Reply
you define brilliance.