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Guess the place! (Free verse) by Patsy
This city remains, despite the natural laws. This city seems a facade a tinted glass to obscure the dilapdated past. Overcompensation for lacerations earned through size and concentration. It remains indecisive: am i floating or simply allowing a mass/Maas to flow through? Despite bravado, macho demeanor superimposed on fate which happens and happens and cannot unhappen, this city would that it could drift. Would that it could fall amnesiac. Its tinted past glass is somedays turned aquarium. The sun comes in and no out in sight, now reflect, then inward, to preen. It's not asking your approval, preferring your silent, if sticky retreat.

Up the ladder: Tomorrow

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Arithmetic Mean: 6.8333335
Weighted score: 5.493059
Overall Rank: 2804
Posted: August 14, 2004 2:38 PM PDT; Last modified: August 14, 2004 2:38 PM PDT
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Comments:
[10] MacFrantic @ 198.81.26.16 | 15-Aug-04/1:14 AM | Reply
*10* Take the time to spell check.
[n/a] Patsy @ 68.151.3.48 | 15-Aug-04/3:55 PM | Reply
Oops. Dilapidated. Anything else? i could find anything, so.
[10] basit_i @ 209.148.205.60 | 17-Aug-04/10:04 PM | Reply
this, i think, goes further than other-of-i-have-seen. the "Maas" makes me want to guess in that direction, but i feel cautious tonight...
[6] Bachus @ 24.130.62.63 | 17-Aug-04/11:31 PM | Reply
Is it Uranus?
[10] basit_i @ 209.148.207.201 > Bachus | 18-Aug-04/5:54 PM | Reply
you define brilliance.
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