| Re: You are a divider by Bachus |
x0lovelylarnx0 68.57.36.157 |
9-Oct-07/6:07 PM |
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WOW!!! Imagery is effective!
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| Re: My first wish and last by Bachus |
x0lovelylarnx0 68.57.36.157 |
9-Oct-07/6:06 PM |
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Well Put together! Love it!
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| Re: Bitter by Ranger |
x0lovelylarnx0 68.57.36.157 |
9-Oct-07/3:34 PM |
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I love the way you repeat the lines but add something different afterwards! ALso, This poem makes the reader feel the narator's emotions. Love the Poem!
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| Re: A double haiku about President Putin by Engelbert Humpalot |
SupremeDreamer 130.65.109.104 |
9-Oct-07/1:20 PM |
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| Re: a comment on Death of a Drug Addict by SupremeDreamer |
SupremeDreamer 130.65.109.104 |
9-Oct-07/1:17 PM |
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You are stupid to assume that the young man of the poem is me, you twit.
Also, I am a selfish asshole... not cunt mind you, that's a term I tend to reserve for women and queer folk such as yourself.
Wops? You mean Romans? Romans and actual modern Italians are different; from what I remember of the Bible, the Jews were the ones that decided upon his crucifixion, the Romans simply carried it out.
Toodles shithead.
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| Re: Thoughts Asunder by wilco |
Engelbert Humpalot 85.211.244.15 |
8-Oct-07/6:59 AM |
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Good last stanza. Best just to shag her and bugger off.
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| Re: NIGHTMILK SUNBLOOD by horus8 |
Engelbert Humpalot 85.211.244.15 |
8-Oct-07/6:58 AM |
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| Re: Bitter by Ranger |
Engelbert Humpalot 85.211.244.15 |
8-Oct-07/6:58 AM |
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| Re: Butterfield, Minn. Tommy's farm 1993 by Bachus |
Engelbert Humpalot 85.211.244.15 |
8-Oct-07/6:57 AM |
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Ungrammatical first stanza. You must have been off school the day they taught sentences.
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| Re: 'Till Then by sliver |
Engelbert Humpalot 85.211.244.15 |
8-Oct-07/6:56 AM |
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Sentimental and sloppy in the extreme.
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| Re: Rooster Rape by Dovina |
Engelbert Humpalot 85.211.244.15 |
8-Oct-07/6:55 AM |
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Fabulous first couplet rhyme! Henhouse and house! Genius! The rest of it is rubbish. The funniest thing since 9/11.
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| Re: a comment on I Hope by BrandonW |
BrandonW 76.97.67.182 |
7-Oct-07/8:09 PM |
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i sometimes find it hard to deviate from writing the 100% spot-on factual truth about some events.. hell, even for the sake of the piece.. this just being another example of that.. coming to the end of my thoughts all i could do was let it be and hope that there was some truth in what i was saying.. i hope
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| Re: I Hope by BrandonW |
Dovina 66.215.80.177 |
7-Oct-07/7:15 PM |
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A good theme and mostly well executed. The rhymes seem more distraction than poetry. and "I hope" at the end adds what?
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| Re: Under The Knife by PoetryIsDead |
Dovina 66.215.80.177 |
7-Oct-07/7:09 PM |
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too involved for haiku, I think. But the last line is clever.
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| Re: A Kiss Beneath The Blossom Tree by Caducus |
Engelbert Humpalot 85.211.239.13 |
7-Oct-07/10:20 AM |
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| Re: Some die waiting, or laugh forgetting by Shardik |
Engelbert Humpalot 85.211.239.13 |
7-Oct-07/10:19 AM |
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I wept more at this than when I got my bollocks caught in my zip.
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| Re: Strap On by Shardik |
Engelbert Humpalot 85.211.239.13 |
7-Oct-07/10:18 AM |
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Fucking incomprehensible! I loved it!
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| Re: a comment on May Sinners Rot In Fucking Hell! by Sing4Jesus! |
Engelbert Humpalot 85.211.239.13 |
7-Oct-07/10:17 AM |
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| Re: a comment on Jesus by Sing4Jesus! |
Engelbert Humpalot 85.211.239.13 |
7-Oct-07/10:16 AM |
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Because most people here have better taste than you, that's why.
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| Re: A prayer about Jesus by Sing4Jesus! |
Engelbert Humpalot 85.211.239.13 |
7-Oct-07/10:14 AM |
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I just re-read this. Only just.
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