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You are a divider

Member since 2002 · Posted 23 Jul 2003 · Edited 14 Sep 2003 · 12 comments

"I'd think you'd be better off if you were dead" The band Filter is screaming through tweeter & woofer on my home stereo, fucking my neighbors Off to dodge a haircut and my breakfast "Did you think you were cool" when it came down to the fast lane divider that's what you are ______________________________ ------------------------------ A DIVIDER, ANOTHER WHITE LINE rain water in the gulley twixt A GUARD RAIL COLORED WITH KNIX A DIVIDER, ANOTHER WHITE LINE ==DOUBLE YELLOW THE OTHER SIDE ------------------------------ ______________________________ I know your type & what you'll do to your friends, to anyone that will listen, and watch. Absorbing the moment I've seen the getaway I've seen the reversal. And how it burns through the eyes turning us to dust & ash. In a fever, in a boat, in a stroke of luck purchased at some general store along a highway I've worked against the grain for a grander purpose. To find them Then love them to death "But I really don't understand it" When the song's over.

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[10] Druid_Girl_1984 23-Jul-03/6:47 PM Reply
Thank you for voting and commenting on one of my poems. I really liked this piece so i give it a ten. = )
[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> › Druid_Girl_1984 23-Jul-03/7:04 PM Reply
hu umm. I see, well, what makes you think I imagined you were a gay Jew, by the way?
[n/a] Bachus › Druid_Girl_1984 25-Jul-03/3:29 PM Reply
I love you.
[10] thepinkbunnyofdoom › Bachus 25-Jul-03/10:58 PM Reply
Awe.. Your such a darling, and a musician too. If only I had a vagina to call my own to rape you with. *sigh*
[n/a] Bachus › thepinkbunnyofdoom 26-Jul-03/4:28 PM Reply
How about one you don't call your own? Rape me with a friends.
[10] thepinkbunnyofdoom 23-Jul-03/7:48 PM Reply
Something tells me your either pining or lamenting love. Call me crazy, but this doesn't whack me on the head and cause a shitload of thought, and yet I think its very touching. -10-
[n/a] Bachus › thepinkbunnyofdoom 25-Jul-03/3:29 PM Reply
I love you.
[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> 17-Aug-03/7:15 PM Reply
Jeepers creepers 2
[9] nentwined 15-Sep-03/7:15 AM Reply
I like this, though I can't think why. 9.
[4] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? 15-Sep-03/2:40 PM Reply
I'm sure your neighbours are perfectly nice people.
[9] INTRANSIT 15-Sep-03/5:02 PM Reply
Suggestion: DON'T Love with your all. Save some for yourself. It won't affect the intensity level at all. It's another dimension behind the levels. go.
[10] x0lovelylarnx0 9-Oct-07/6:07 PM Reply
WOW!!! Imagery is effective!