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You are a divider (Concrete) by Bachus
"I'd think you'd be better off if you were dead" The band Filter is screaming through tweeter & woofer on my home stereo, fucking my neighbors Off to dodge a haircut and my breakfast "Did you think you were cool" when it came down to the fast lane divider that's what you are ______________________________ ------------------------------ A DIVIDER, ANOTHER WHITE LINE rain water in the gulley twixt A GUARD RAIL COLORED WITH KNIX A DIVIDER, ANOTHER WHITE LINE ==DOUBLE YELLOW THE OTHER SIDE ------------------------------ ______________________________ I know your type & what you'll do to your friends, to anyone that will listen, and watch. Absorbing the moment I've seen the getaway I've seen the reversal. And how it burns through the eyes turning us to dust & ash. In a fever, in a boat, in a stroke of luck purchased at some general store along a highway I've worked against the grain for a grander purpose. To find them Then love them to death "But I really don't understand it" When the song's over.

Up the ladder: A Better God
Down the ladder: Tears

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.047619
Weighted score: 7.0107903
Overall Rank: 65
Posted: July 23, 2003 1:01 PM PDT; Last modified: September 14, 2003 7:49 PM PDT
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[10] Druid_Girl_1984 @ 208.60.246.17 | 23-Jul-03/6:47 PM | Reply
Thank you for voting and commenting on one of my poems. I really liked this piece so i give it a ten. = )
[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 > Druid_Girl_1984 | 23-Jul-03/7:04 PM | Reply
hu umm. I see, well, what makes you think I imagined you were a gay Jew, by the way?
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 > Druid_Girl_1984 | 25-Jul-03/3:29 PM | Reply
I love you.
[10] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.21.223 > Bachus | 25-Jul-03/10:58 PM | Reply
Awe.. Your such a darling, and a musician too. If only I had a vagina to call my own to rape you with. *sigh*
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 > thepinkbunnyofdoom | 26-Jul-03/4:28 PM | Reply
How about one you don't call your own? Rape me with a friends.
[10] thepinkbunnyofdoom @ 24.209.21.223 | 23-Jul-03/7:48 PM | Reply
Something tells me your either pining or lamenting love. Call me crazy, but this doesn't whack me on the head and cause a shitload of thought, and yet I think its very touching. -10-
[n/a] Bachus @ 24.126.113.154 > thepinkbunnyofdoom | 25-Jul-03/3:29 PM | Reply
I love you.
[10] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 17-Aug-03/7:15 PM | Reply
Jeepers creepers 2
[9] nentwined @ 66.92.183.34 | 15-Sep-03/7:15 AM | Reply
I like this, though I can't think why. 9.
[4] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? @ 195.92.67.75 | 15-Sep-03/2:40 PM | Reply
I'm sure your neighbours are perfectly nice people.
[9] INTRANSIT @ 32.102.22.23 | 15-Sep-03/5:02 PM | Reply
Suggestion: DON'T Love with your all. Save some for yourself. It won't affect the intensity level at all. It's another dimension behind the levels. go.
[10] x0lovelylarnx0 @ 68.57.36.157 | 9-Oct-07/6:07 PM | Reply
WOW!!! Imagery is effective!
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