| Re: Thespian by BrandonW |
PoeticXTC 152.163.100.135 |
14-Jan-06/4:49 PM |
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But over all the negative comments it made since
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| Re: Chills by BrandonW |
PoeticXTC 152.163.100.135 |
14-Jan-06/4:52 PM |
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Your right, anxiety is the enemy.
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| Re: why? by nentwined |
PoeticXTC 152.163.100.135 |
14-Jan-06/5:56 PM |
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Man, you started off excellent. Just wished the ending was more intense.
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| Re: Censor by nentwined |
PoeticXTC 152.163.100.135 |
14-Jan-06/6:01 PM |
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| Re: dit da haiku by nentwined |
PoeticXTC 152.163.100.135 |
14-Jan-06/6:02 PM |
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lol, answer your cell phone!!! Lmao!
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| Re: killer boredom butterfly (psychedelic) by nentwined |
PoeticXTC 152.163.100.135 |
14-Jan-06/6:05 PM |
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| Re: killer boredom butterfly (esoteric) by nentwined |
PoeticXTC 152.163.100.135 |
14-Jan-06/6:08 PM |
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
PoeticXTC 205.188.117.10 |
14-Jan-06/8:08 PM |
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| Re: On the Discovery of Cinder Cats and The Road More Traveled by MacFrantic |
PoeticXTC 205.188.117.10 |
14-Jan-06/8:11 PM |
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| Re: Cool In The Army by wilco |
PoeticXTC 205.188.117.10 |
14-Jan-06/8:12 PM |
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| Re: On the Discovery of Cheez Wiz/The Day I Fell Off the Earth by MacFrantic |
PoeticXTC 205.188.117.10 |
14-Jan-06/8:14 PM |
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| Re: Dear M Foucault, or, How I knew our relationship was doomed by zodiac |
PoeticXTC 205.188.117.10 |
14-Jan-06/8:20 PM |
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| Re: Do 20 always make this poem sense? by Prince of Void |
Prince of Void 213.207.224.156 |
15-Jan-06/7:39 AM |
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| Re: levity kiss by skaskowski |
ecargo 172.140.127.220 |
15-Jan-06/9:11 AM |
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I get the "rules"-Leviticus intent, I guess (Leviticus is the book that deals w/ rules and ritual, right?), but the connection seems flimsy.
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| Re: Racism 2 by Dovina |
ecargo 172.140.127.220 |
15-Jan-06/9:18 AM |
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The main problem with this is too much telling, not enough showing. Dave Chappelle does a bit about being driven into the projects and knowing that's where they were headed because: "gun store, gun store, liquor store, gun store." That raises an immediate image, just those few words. That's what's missing here. More "liquor store,
the greasy hot-dog stand" and less narrative and blatant point-making.
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| regarding some deleted poem... |
ecargo 172.140.127.220 |
15-Jan-06/9:24 AM |
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Some nice detail, but some of your images don't hang together quite right. "She was
green but full of spring, fascinated with chicken wings." Huh? Swizzlesticks mix but aren't mixed, that kinda thing. Amusing.
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| Re: Schoolyard Walls by Joe-joe |
pollywolly 62.30.170.78 |
15-Jan-06/11:01 AM |
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i thought this was super, great use of descriptive language where you can almost here the children playing and chattering. well done
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| Re: My Reason by PoeticXTC |
pollywolly 62.30.170.78 |
15-Jan-06/11:29 AM |
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this seems to be a very angry piece atlest that is the way i read it but i cant seem to find reasons within the anger that justify it?
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| Re: Desperate Season by Sisterwolf |
pollywolly 62.30.170.78 |
15-Jan-06/11:48 AM |
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i like this piece alot. very accurate descriptions and quite animated. i would love to see you write a piece from a different angle e.g how wonderful winter can be. well done
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| Re: awakening by pollywolly |
Dovina 209.247.222.92 |
15-Jan-06/2:11 PM |
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If it says what I think it might, it's a nice picture. Could you make it more clear, and say stand instead of stands?
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